Venus Walked On The Sun's Chest Poem by Neela Nath Das
Venus Walked On The Sun's Chest
Eight years before walked
On the sun's chest; Earth's
Twin, the Morning Star.
And then you went back
Leaving a bruise in his
Heart; The back-counting
Began- when you would
Keep your gentle steps
Again on that burning
Ball! Ah! The day came!
Yesterday, billion
Curious eyes watched
You, passing through
Silently like a fairy
Of a dreamland, your
Foot prints imprinted
On him like a dropp
Of shade; making a
Cosmic record your
Transit became one
With the relativity,
To come back again on
The hot zone of the
Only source of our
Eternal Energy in 2117!
Nilakshi Nath, Are you joking? 'Leaving a bruise in his Heart; ' That's the reason people, sometimes, laugh at the poets like us for writing something totally not true....
walk on the chest of the fire ball itself unimaginable and go into it and hurt it further is something not appealing, though the scene is such a beautiful sight! When it is documented in the poetical form, the flaws should be avoided..
I love your celestial theme, drawn together and personified cleverly. Excellent poem!
Yeah that phenomenon really excited me too...Bruise in his heart when a dot covered a shiny sun bright background and it made all people stand for few minutes to watch this rare days...well at least i can watch it in net or youtube hahahaha....it's a good documentation of a phenomenon in a poetry_Unwritten Soul
Has a nice philosophical/fable feel, with a touch of scientific romanticism! Well done! The last words are really powerful for some reason to me...
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/24/2024 9:10:50 PM # 1.0.0.1119
so nice ur expression, I like ur poem