When U Were Forced To Cry. Poem by sagar patil.

Oh my dear friend, Sagar, be strong, be strong, be free be free...this is how you tell your heart how hard life is when the things come out not as we wish...you must move on, i am sure dpka will understand....i am so glad to see the great feeling in you that really pure and chaste, but must be ware dont kill your tears with pain yet it will fall and drown u in suffocating emotion...nice write sagar_Unwritten Soul

Very honest. Love has no full stop. God bless you. Keep sharing you're work.

i heard when a guy falls in love he becomes a man and how spectacular man you have became......... i am speechless after reading your piece... love' payal

Falling in love is not a sin, but we should not regret later for having fallen in love too early, too young, wrong person and many more. so enjoy yourself if you think that you are all right!

Dpka. Your earnest love for your ladylove, Dipika(?) is expressed here earnestly.

I Liked ur way to end the poem....a beautiful & romantic poem..hmm

I must always reread you, Sagar, such sensitivity. The good of love is a bit of pain and longing, but do not give up never.She can also be happy with you, waiting for you!

I would use a capital to start the first line of each stanza. Also only use one? per stanza. Line Why did faith loyalty love thwart, needs reworking faith and loyalty, or faith loyally.. I would have used When instead of why for Why did become sinful, you need to put and adverb in front of become, When did it become sinful.. Love the last line in that stanza, beautifully evocative. Why have you not why u have.. We're distanced even.. another great line. Poetry all about saying something huge in a few words and you are defiantly a poet. I think you meant to put I can't stop thinking about you? Merely grammatical errors. Very nice job. Samantha

hi sagar, your way of thinking is superb and you perfectly explained your love...gud job »so close«

what a beautiful write! well done. keep writing!