Why? Poem by Linda Ori
Why?
Often in the still of night
I wonder why it wasn't right...............
Why couldn't you love me?
Was there something wrong with me
Something that I couldn't see
That turned you cold inside?
I reached out and offered you
Everything you asked me to............
Why wasn't it enough?
When did passion's flame burn out?
When did you begin to doubt..............
Perhaps you were afraid
Of getting close to someone new,
Committment wasn't part of you................
Your freedom held you back;
I only wanted you to share
My hopes and dreams because I care...............
My feelings were sincere,
But you thought I would stifle you,
Would question everyhing you do..............
And so you chose to run;
In all your life you never knew
Another who would care for you
And overlook your flaws...............
Perhaps you couldn't understand
Why I reached out to take your hand -
To share my life with you.................
And in your insecurity
You turned and walked away from me..............
Why couldn't you love me?
This one brought tears of sadness to my eyes. Maybe someday he will wake up and realise what he has missed.......oh, and I agree with Tara! Top marks for putting these feelings into poetry form so well. Love, Fran xxx
You have taken an ageless theme and breathed into it new light and life. There is something beyond sadness in your questioning. Acceptance perhaps and an inner knowing that you did all you could - that sometimes people need to make the choices they do, even when those choices come from fear. A poignant, yet courageous poem. Beautifully written. love, Allie xxxx
I think we wonder at times why a promising start fizzles out for no apparent reason Linda. Sometimes people marry and hope it will turn out alright. Better to cut and run unless you are quite certain. In the old days couples actually took time to get to kinow eadh other before committing themselves. Perhaps courting for a number of years. Todays society is geared towards instant gratification. Lust is often mistaken for love and when the passion dies theres nothing left. To love someone who does not love you in return is painful. You expressed yourself extremely well I loved the format rhyming couplets with attached questions
Well-written, this one really draws you in and has you pondering.
confidence once drained breeds insecurity… tendency to run away from responsibilities deserting love and sincerity… impressive write though sad to read +10+
Well written. Stanzas are tight and the first one is a great intro. Gave it a ten. Adeline
Most unfortunate- yet reality of life one has to reconcile. Let God give you strength sufficient to accept the facts of life!
Hi Linda after you took the time to comment on my poem i thought i would take a look at yours.. i like this poem a lot.. in my experience things always seem worse late at night if you are alone.. sometimes it's hard to accept that you have lost someone. but i guess these experiences can never really be squared in your own mind...lovely poem though
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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I can totally relate to this sweetheart. A grand piece. And the answer? 1) he needs to grow up and 2) you shouldn't care - he ain't worthy. t x