Shauna Stoltz

(03/02/1990 / Washington)

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  • Michael Fischer (3/30/2007 5:31:00 PM)

    'My Heart' is a good poem. But as you progress as a writer, you want to try to avoid cliches and use more creative metaphors and smilies. For example, 'every time I see you, my heart melts away' could be written 'my heart melts like a lit candle when you grace me with your Romeo-like presence' or something like that. But it comes with time. Good luck!
    -Michael

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Rumers

You said you loved me
but what do you mean
treating me like crap
acting as if I don't know a thing
My friends tried to tell me
but I didn't beleive
I wanted it to be perfect
just you and me
but I was wrong

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