Shauna Stoltz

Rookie (03/02/1990 / Washington)

Comments about Shauna Stoltz

  • Rookie Michael Fischer (3/30/2007 5:31:00 PM)

    'My Heart' is a good poem. But as you progress as a writer, you want to try to avoid cliches and use more creative metaphors and smilies. For example, 'every time I see you, my heart melts away' could be written 'my heart melts like a lit candle when you grace me with your Romeo-like presence' or something like that. But it comes with time. Good luck!
    -Michael

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Fear In Me

You look into my eyes
I don't dare look down
I feel your hand hit my face
but I stand my grond

you hit me again
but I take it all in
I refuse to let you hurt me
I refuse to have fear in me

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