Heartbreak Poem by Tan Pratonix

Heartbreak

Rating: 5.0


The lancet of my inner eye
Has pierced the clot of clouds apart
To reveal in the depths of sky
The globule of my heart.

Pulsating in a cage of ribs
You break into a shower of pain;
Whirlpool, you suck into your lips
The viscin of my brain.

The cerebellum in my skull
Compressed by cacophony breaks
Into a lava-throated gull
And spitting fangs of snakes.

Scream silently and scream once more,
The tongue is ripped and torn;
Scream silently a savage O,
For what is dead is gone!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Philippa Lane 08 February 2006

I particularly like the third stanza. You are a true poet, with perfect choice of words and phrases. Another really good poem.

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 03 February 2006

Heartbreak introduces darkness and that is introduced well. 'Into a lava-throated gull...and spitting fangs of snakes.' UGH! Now, that's a crush well depicted. L

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