Amit Ray

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  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (7/10/2009 1:31:00 PM)

    This is what Eman Albedawi has to say

    From: Eman Elbadawi (Cairo Egypt; Female; 34)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 7/10/2009 7: 51: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: If i were her tears-Amit Ray's new poem

    Hello Amit

    I am sorry for answering late
    I was not feeling well

    I have just read the poem
    full of new and deep images

    keep in success


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  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (7/8/2009 1:39:00 PM)

    This is Professor Indira Babbellapati's discretion
    From: Indira Babbellapati (India ;)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 7/8/2009 9: 43: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: In moments-Amit Ray's new poem

    dear dr.amit
    hey, that's cool...i see a discernible change in amit's verse this evening. it's very relaxing to read this level-headed love poem of yours which indeed took me to far away realms gently rocking on a boat...keep it up, young man...happiness is intensely personal and none has any role to make it or mar except you! hope u won't mind my speaking out my mind...

  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (7/8/2009 9:29:00 AM)

    This is Sir Paul Hansford's discretion.

    From: Paul Hansford (Stroud United Kingdom; Male; 70)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 7/7/2009 3: 01: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: Flowers of love-Amit Ray's new poem

    Dear Amit,

    I don't much like being asked to vote on poems, as I never do anyway. Most people don't vote unless they give 10 (or else 1 or 2, to be unpleasant to someone) , so it seems a pointless thing to do. But having been invited to comment, I can only express my opinion.
    On the good side, it is clear that you enjoy language, and the sound of English words. Having said that, though, while the words(*) and most of the syntax(**) are recognisably English, I can't make any sense of lines like -
    'lynching the stigma of passion,
    synching the woes in her paradigms of eternity'
    How do you lynch a stigma? If you synch (synchronise) woes, you have to relate this to something. Was this meant to be a front-rhyme (lynching/synching) ? If so, it doesn't work, as the words are pronounced differently (LINCH/SINK) .
    The section that Lee picks out ('submissive so silly yet lethal the lilly that lolls / in her locks') is impressively alliterated and internally rhymed, but what does it mean?
    'silently round the sirocco of / soirees' is perhaps a little overdone, and what have soirées to do with a wind?
    (BUT 'her tread on my red carpet' is good internal rhyme, and at least this makes sense.)
    'flowing like hyacinths' - do hyacinths flow? and if so, how?

    (*) helexine sems to be a creeping plant (though I had never heard of it under that name, and I would guarantee that no other PH members had either) and doesn't fit the sense.
    'lippy' is either a slang word for lipstick, or it is an adjective meaning 'rude' or 'cheeky'.

    (**) 'ocean which in am a sailor' - do you mean 'ocean in which I am a sailor'?
    'transpire a punishment' - 'transpire' is a verb that does not take a direct object.
    'to catch unaware the lotus be her coup de foudre' - what function does the word BE have here?

    Spelling is less important, but it does matter a bit. CHOSES should be CHOOSES, FRESSIA is FREESIA

    I hate to be negative, and I have been called 'a bit racist' before for criticising the language of Indian sub-continent writers, though that is far from being my opinion. I am merely trying to help, and my comment to summarise all this would be that you have tried nobly, but over-reached yourself. It would perhaps be better if you wrote shorter pieces, using the linguistic tricks if you like, but being certain of what the words actually mean.

    With all good wishes.


  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (7/3/2009 1:32:00 PM)

    From: Daniel Takel (Ebbw Vale United Kingdom; Male; 14)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 7/2/2009 9: 20: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: Flowers of love-Amit Ray's new poem

    I love how you don't just use basic words, but a wider vocabulary to emphasise thoughts and feelings in detail. Great writer... keep on going.

  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (7/1/2009 9:40:00 AM)

    From: Mubeen Sadhika (India ;)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 7/1/2009 9: 38: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: Flowers of love-Amit Ray's new poem

    Your poem is very nice.

    Mubeen Sadhika

  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (6/26/2009 9:31:00 AM)

    From: Jasbir Chatterjee (delhi India; Female; 43)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 6/25/2009 10: 56: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: your poems

    Hi Amit! I read your poems. You seem to have written them with a lot of feeling. Please keep it up, but try to use as few words as possible.

  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (6/25/2009 7:29:00 AM)

    From: Daniel Takel (Ebbw Vale United Kingdom; Male; 14)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 6/24/2009 1: 19: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: One Cup of Coffee

    I thought it was great and you chose the words to suit the situations you described.Well done.

  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (6/24/2009 8:32:00 AM)

    From: Ion Untaru (Finta, Dambovitza Romania; Male; 70)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 6/22/2009 7: 26: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: One cup of coffee-Amit Ray's new poem page-2 number 21

    I read your poem, i like it, congratulations. You have a rich fantaisie, immagination.

  • Allemagne Roßmann Allemagne Roßmann (6/16/2009 9:56:00 PM)

    From: Francis Duggan (Australia ;)
    To: Amit Ray
    Date Time: 6/16/2009 8: 06: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: Re: One cup of coffee-Amit Ray's new poem page-2 number 21

    Hello Ray

    This is an excellent poem up to your usual high standard, your passion and originality shines through here and it is up to your usual high standard, surely a another 10 poem to add to your many great poems, good on you Ray.

    F Duggan

  • anurag duggal (5/27/2009 1:38:00 AM)

    you are nearing your end
    create a million new names
    a million new ids
    but the killer blow
    is about to hit you
    thy vicious cycle
    u started
    will gulp you in
    you oversmart bufoon
    thy days are counted........

Best Poem of Amit Ray

****~arranged Marriage~****

And they came all blueberry cranberry blackberry cherry
and I remained dumbfounded whom to pop and whom to marry
worry and merry like tom and jerry
in a flurry to life`s golden galarie
and I went on choosing a perfect french for my calvary
Britanny my red carpet strawberry

Left mrs discreet and right miss discrete in ferry
my rubber is perplexed where to serry
Then an old pal Sherry called on from Banbury
telling she knows a single mom gooseberry to take my Cadbury
But women made always my life ghetto like
the syllables of sonnetina rispetto telling tales...

Read the full of ****~arranged Marriage~****



The augury of him in Crimea was so
That Ekaterina said she was tired of sandwiches
But I did have black tea, black Latvian bread with her black Ikra near Black Sea
Hundreds of kilometres from Kiev and from Moscow in Odessa where heresy breaches

I beated her wings in no confinement, in no vituperation
She flew flower to flower to no destination

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