I think that your poems/lyrics are great. Though I highly reckomend to keep your language in black and white. I'm not the biggest fan on colorful languages. Besides that, I love your work. Keep writing!
It's just how it is. Sorry. Condemned, like a building no longer fit for habitation, where the dry rot has spread to our hearts and the termites are the tiny monarchs of our crumbling ambitions. When I was a child,