I think that your poems/lyrics are great. Though I highly reckomend to keep your language in black and white. I'm not the biggest fan on colorful languages. Besides that, I love your work. Keep writing!
Blood on the snow; the falling white, like icy spikes. The sky is low; so oppressive it feels like it's resting on my scalp. Such a dull shade of slate, that hopeless grey of gunmetal and doubt. And just beneath,