Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 420,853 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Hasmukh Amathalal Poems

2481. I.C.U 11/12/2010
2482. A Hollow Life 11/13/2010
2483. A Nation To Be Loved 11/13/2010
2484. Always Blue 11/13/2010
2485. A Moral Police 10/22/2010
2486. A Heed To An Advise 10/23/2010
2487. A Day In Field 11/14/2010
2488. Rest Of Life 11/16/2010
2489. In Open Lines 11/16/2010
2490. Papa's Doll 11/16/2010
2491. A Response To Inner Call 11/17/2010
2492. A Change To Witness 11/17/2010
2493. A Tears For No Reason 11/17/2010
2494. Why Sex Not Dignified 11/17/2010
2495. As The Show Goes On 11/18/2010
2496. Very Real 11/18/2010
2497. Only Friendship 11/18/2010
2498. A Change To Adapt 11/19/2010
2499. Get On Well 11/19/2010
2500. Oh, Almighty 11/20/2010
2501. What Is Love? 11/20/2010
2502. He Is Gone 11/21/2010
2503. Gone Were The Days 11/21/2010
2504. A Lust For Shine 11/21/2010
2505. A Dream Only 11/21/2010
2506. A Heart And Mind 11/22/2010
2507. A Helpless Animal 11/22/2010
2508. A Not Very Far 11/22/2010
2509. A Trusted Friends 11/24/2010
2510. An Apology 11/24/2010
2511. A Day Ends 11/25/2010
2512. A Praise Around 11/25/2010
2513. A Praise To Go Around 11/25/2010
2514. A Long Inning 11/25/2010
2515. It Is Enough 11/26/2010
2516. At Every Stage 11/23/2010
2517. A Weak Love 11/23/2010
2518. A Massage Of Love 11/28/2010
2519. O, Soldier Sons 11/28/2010
2520. A Direct Talk 11/29/2010

Comments about Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/1/2010 6:53:00 AM)

    We are all different Jadia. That's what makes us unique.. I so loved this for it's honesty inside it. The way we have to sometimes hide who we are, yet the ones we hurt are ourselves. Letting others in and know who we are, our feelings, is always the best.. It is up to them to either like us and take us for who we are, or walk away..

    Another fine write here.

    Moonie xx

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    Thu Apr 01,2010 11: 42

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/1/2010 6:20:00 AM)

    From : David Dale Kush (south bend United States; Male; 58)
    To : Hasmukh Amathalal
    Date Time : 4/1/2010 1: 07: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject : Re: dear sir

    we who write from the soul like yourself are always
    wonderful to reaqd keep up thegood work for I believe words can change the world my friend

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/27/2010 7:35:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/27/2010 9: 25: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21967348 - A dead end
    Member: Rajkumar Mukherjee
    Comment: Dear Hasmukhlalji,
    Thanks for your invite to read and rate your poem 'dead end'
    We are perhaps sailing in the same boat and as such our feelings match
    This is the time to introspect through our life's journey and share the profound knowledge with the younger generation.
    Your poem is a journeyin the same direction.
    The rhyming pattern of the poem is fine maintaining AA/BB pattern but no of lines you have exceeded the meter length.
    You can easily correct those by using a few imageriesor metaphors
    I find the meter counts of stanza 2 as most appropriate for this type of poem.
    A few friendly suggestion-
    1) S1 L2- a typo 'know' should bre 'known'
    2) S1 L 4 can be changed to 'no one may learn how much I succeded' This wil also create an inter-rhyming with third line.
    3) S 2 L 3 'AT' can be deleted as superflous.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/25/2010 2:03:00 AM)

    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Zafar Tahir
    Comment: Hasmukh gee adab:
    Same blood same thinking:
    Fist lesson we were tought was; there is heaven under the feet of mother:
    That is start and end of this worthy state of our being.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/23/2010 7:34:00 AM)

    Poem: 21934573 - All answers
    Member: John Knight
    Comment: Hi Hasmukh - A very interesting and philosophic poem. V 1 Highlights the fact that 21st C Man is very materialistic and also very dissatisfied with what he has. V 2 The Holy Scriptures say 'Godliness with contentment is great gain'. V 3 We need to consider the situation of the AVERAGE MAN in the World. He has so litle compared with what we have in the UK. A comparison woulld soon make us 'Count our Blessings' for what we take for granted. V 4 A soft life erodes our resisitance and 'The moral fibre is lost'. V 5 In order to have less stress and a degree of mental peace we need to be less of the 'Now Generation' and take a long - term view. V 6 Ambition is a good thing - but it needs to be in persective. V 7 'Rejoice and participate in the thing in the natural way'. We need to take some risk - but we can't fly - remember Icarus. V 8 What great advice and what a great ending 'Doing what comes naturally'. Joy - self fulfillment - satisfaction - no pain - no rejection - So let it be.. Thanks for sharing. yours in poetry - JOHN.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:32:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 06: 00 PM

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    Poem: 17742708 - A place called
    Member: Bethany Williams
    Comment: Such beauty in a great poem. Great words used in this poem.. I had such a great time reading this....10+++

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:30:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21897681 - A 'Papa, please'
    Member: Elna Mercado
    Comment: my eyes grow wider, my heart beats faster......my childhood....in your lines.....tears.....
    as a single mom, i consciously chosen not to do as it was in my childhood but i must confess, i did....the feeling was horrifying, hunting. i have written an apology to my son when he was 13.....waited for forgiveness.....when it did, gratefulness is so sweet...

    parenting is very difficult and i read you struggle with that too....when we go deeper within and recognize what is going through, it become our strength and guideline for change and /or modification what we can do for the next time...

    you write so vividly with emotions that move a reader.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 8:56:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/19/2010 1: 50: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21861341 - A trouble in offing
    Member: Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK
    Comment: ‘…Love is after all God’s gift and can’t be had at paying prize
    I accept it as simple divine shower and happily summarize ‘

    Fabulous finish … true Love now-a-days is as rare as pure Heart

    We’ve lost that heart and ….egoic [selfish] with preponderance of egotism… I’m the best …
    Before marrying or falling in love we must read good poems as primer to make us receptacle of Love

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 5:29:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/18/2010 7: 36: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21874612 - A different challenge
    Member: Will F. D. Blackman
    Comment: I liked the way you built on the notes
    played from line to line. Not all storytellers
    are poets but all poets are storytellers.
    A very fine job telling this one.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/17/2010 8:24:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/17/2010 8: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21874612 - A different challenge
    Member: Sridevi Datta
    Comment: Don’t cry for somebody’s action and fault
    It might have been insult and somersault
    You got to forget and brace for new lease of life
    You may prove very good mother and honored wife
    yes....at some point of time...we need to put our past behind us and stop blaming ourselves...that will liberate us in the real sense.

Best Poem of Hasmukh Amathalal

Miss ', I Really Miss (101) /500 ###

I was stepping in to become young
I thought it is nice journey but too long
I am afraid and take care not to go wrong
I was expecting everything for song

I am so much influenced by lady smile
She has entered in life just before while'
Life seems to be so interesting and fine
I want to dance on floor with glass of wine

Miss, you can't be so rude
For a word you have made prelude,
All warmth and affection you have included
Hate and distance you have excluded

I never expected you to cast
All doubts but trust should not last
You were the ...

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We were not sure
About our future
Whether she will join my journey
It was doubtful prophecy

I tried my level best
As I considered it to be crucial test

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