Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 495,822 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Hasmukh Amathalal Poems

2521. A Long Time 7/26/2010
2522. A Time Out 7/29/2010
2523. A Good Gesture 7/29/2010
2524. A Total Discard 7/31/2010
2525. A Reason To Part With 7/31/2010
2526. A Wish To Remain 7/30/2010
2527. A Firm N Focus 7/30/2010
2528. A Short Of Sight 8/1/2010
2529. At His Mercy 8/1/2010
2530. An Useful Thought 8/1/2010
2531. And More To Yield 8/1/2010
2532. A No To Desire 8/2/2010
2533. Available Free 8/2/2010
2534. A Cuckoo To Resurface 8/2/2010
2535. Almost Total Lies 8/2/2010
2536. A Special Reason 8/3/2010
2537. Assert To Self 8/3/2010
2538. Any Length 8/3/2010
2539. Am Cruel 8/4/2010
2540. A Word To Be 8/4/2010
2541. A Night Is Beautiful 8/5/2010
2542. Allay Your Fears 8/5/2010
2543. A No To Question 8/4/2010
2544. A Day At Home 8/6/2010
2545. An Ordinary Fool 8/6/2010
2546. A Little Love 8/6/2010
2547. A Rose Is Always Rose 8/6/2010
2548. A Silent Dream 8/6/2010
2549. A Pure Love 8/7/2010
2550. A Result In 8/7/2010
2551. A Good Surprise 8/7/2010
2552. A Place To Find 8/7/2010
2553. A Way Apart 8/8/2010
2554. A Real Joke 8/8/2010
2555. A Suicidal Tendency 8/9/2010
2556. An Inner Depth 8/9/2010
2557. A Song For 8/9/2010
2558. A Good Listner 8/9/2010
2559. At Outside World 8/9/2010
2560. As I Wish It 8/10/2010

Comments about Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/2/2010 11:07:00 PM)

    From : Deborah Cameron (United States ;)

    To : Hasmukh Amathalal

    Date Time : 4/2/2010 1: 00: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)


    Subject : Your poems

    Thank you for recommending your poems to me. You are a thoughtful wordsmith.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/1/2010 6:53:00 AM)

    We are all different Jadia. That's what makes us unique.. I so loved this for it's honesty inside it. The way we have to sometimes hide who we are, yet the ones we hurt are ourselves. Letting others in and know who we are, our feelings, is always the best.. It is up to them to either like us and take us for who we are, or walk away..

    Another fine write here.

    Hugs,
    Moonie xx


    © MoonStar Rose

    Thu Apr 01,2010 11: 42

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (4/1/2010 6:20:00 AM)

    From : David Dale Kush (south bend United States; Male; 58)
    To : Hasmukh Amathalal
    Date Time : 4/1/2010 1: 07: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject : Re: dear sir

    we who write from the soul like yourself are always
    wonderful to reaqd keep up thegood work for I believe words can change the world my friend

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/27/2010 7:35:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/27/2010 9: 25: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21967348 - A dead end
    Member: Rajkumar Mukherjee
    Comment: Dear Hasmukhlalji,
    Thanks for your invite to read and rate your poem 'dead end'
    We are perhaps sailing in the same boat and as such our feelings match
    This is the time to introspect through our life's journey and share the profound knowledge with the younger generation.
    Your poem is a journeyin the same direction.
    The rhyming pattern of the poem is fine maintaining AA/BB pattern but no of lines you have exceeded the meter length.
    You can easily correct those by using a few imageriesor metaphors
    I find the meter counts of stanza 2 as most appropriate for this type of poem.
    A few friendly suggestion-
    1) S1 L2- a typo 'know' should bre 'known'
    2) S1 L 4 can be changed to 'no one may learn how much I succeded' This wil also create an inter-rhyming with third line.
    3) S 2 L 3 'AT' can be deleted as superflous.
    LIKED THE POEM. RATED HIGH
    Rajkumar

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/25/2010 2:03:00 AM)

    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Zafar Tahir
    Comment: Hasmukh gee adab:
    Same blood same thinking:
    Fist lesson we were tought was; there is heaven under the feet of mother:
    That is start and end of this worthy state of our being.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/23/2010 7:34:00 AM)

    Poem: 21934573 - All answers
    Member: John Knight
    Comment: Hi Hasmukh - A very interesting and philosophic poem. V 1 Highlights the fact that 21st C Man is very materialistic and also very dissatisfied with what he has. V 2 The Holy Scriptures say 'Godliness with contentment is great gain'. V 3 We need to consider the situation of the AVERAGE MAN in the World. He has so litle compared with what we have in the UK. A comparison woulld soon make us 'Count our Blessings' for what we take for granted. V 4 A soft life erodes our resisitance and 'The moral fibre is lost'. V 5 In order to have less stress and a degree of mental peace we need to be less of the 'Now Generation' and take a long - term view. V 6 Ambition is a good thing - but it needs to be in persective. V 7 'Rejoice and participate in the thing in the natural way'. We need to take some risk - but we can't fly - remember Icarus. V 8 What great advice and what a great ending 'Doing what comes naturally'. Joy - self fulfillment - satisfaction - no pain - no rejection - So let it be.. Thanks for sharing. yours in poetry - JOHN.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:32:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 06: 00 PM

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    Poem: 17742708 - A place called
    Member: Bethany Williams
    Comment: Such beauty in a great poem. Great words used in this poem.. I had such a great time reading this....10+++

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:30:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21897681 - A 'Papa, please'
    Member: Elna Mercado
    Comment: my eyes grow wider, my heart beats faster......my childhood....in your lines.....tears.....
    as a single mom, i consciously chosen not to do as it was in my childhood but i must confess, i did....the feeling was horrifying, hunting. i have written an apology to my son when he was 13.....waited for forgiveness.....when it did, gratefulness is so sweet...

    parenting is very difficult and i read you struggle with that too....when we go deeper within and recognize what is going through, it become our strength and guideline for change and /or modification what we can do for the next time...

    you write so vividly with emotions that move a reader.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 8:56:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/19/2010 1: 50: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21861341 - A trouble in offing
    Member: Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK
    Comment: ‘…Love is after all God’s gift and can’t be had at paying prize
    I accept it as simple divine shower and happily summarize ‘

    Fabulous finish … true Love now-a-days is as rare as pure Heart

    We’ve lost that heart and ….egoic [selfish] with preponderance of egotism… I’m the best …
    Before marrying or falling in love we must read good poems as primer to make us receptacle of Love
    10++

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 5:29:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/18/2010 7: 36: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21874612 - A different challenge
    Member: Will F. D. Blackman
    Comment: I liked the way you built on the notes
    played from line to line. Not all storytellers
    are poets but all poets are storytellers.
    A very fine job telling this one.

Best Poem of Hasmukh Amathalal

Miss ', I Really Miss (101) /500 ###

I was stepping in to become young
I thought it is nice journey but too long
I am afraid and take care not to go wrong
I was expecting everything for song

I am so much influenced by lady smile
She has entered in life just before while'
Life seems to be so interesting and fine
I want to dance on floor with glass of wine

Miss, you can't be so rude
For a word you have made prelude,
All warmth and affection you have included
Hate and distance you have excluded

I never expected you to cast
All doubts but trust should not last
You were the ...

Read the full of Miss ', I Really Miss (101) /500 ###

I Lived Not

I lived not up to expectations
Thus raised distrust and many questions,
Had promised to keep words,
In the name of God and also Lords,

Promise is simple but after all promise,
To be observed till approach of demise,
Never to forget any and not to compromise,
Not to break any just to sprang surprise,

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