Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 465,829 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Hasmukh Amathalal Poems

2561. As I Cry 9/22/2010
2562. An Olive Branch 9/22/2010
2563. A Love By Default 9/22/2010
2564. An Answer You Have 9/22/2010
2565. A Success And Failure 9/22/2010
2566. I Am Lost 9/23/2010
2567. The Original Plan 9/23/2010
2568. A Fair Chance 9/23/2010
2569. Remember What We Are 9/23/2010
2570. A Light Of The Day 9/23/2010
2571. A Love Of The Day 9/23/2010
2572. I Cease To 9/23/2010
2573. A Gentle Sob 9/16/2010
2574. A Music In All 9/16/2010
2575. A Matter In Question 9/17/2010
2576. A Matter In Quesion 9/17/2010
2577. A Young Nation 9/17/2010
2578. A Fall And Shame 9/17/2010
2579. A Wish To Remain And Last 9/17/2010
2580. A Free Hand 9/18/2010
2581. An Act Of Devil 9/19/2010
2582. A Yesteryears 9/19/2010
2583. A Good Choice 9/19/2010
2584. An Anxiety Is Seen 9/19/2010
2585. A Dark Night 9/20/2010
2586. A Special Space 9/20/2010
2587. A Love And Violence 9/20/2010
2588. A Beautiful Object 9/20/2010
2589. A Love Is Promise 9/24/2010
2590. A Total Deception 9/24/2010
2591. A Love To Dominate 9/24/2010
2592. A Very Good Day 9/24/2010
2593. A Lots Of Pain 9/25/2010
2594. Action In Contemplation 9/25/2010
2595. A Turning Gold 9/25/2010
2596. A Poems Are Treasure 9/26/2010
2597. A Love For Neighbor 9/26/2010
2598. A Reversible Trend 9/26/2010
2599. Ya, It Is Love 9/27/2010
2600. A Peace For Trial 9/27/2010

Comments about Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (2/16/2010 8:10:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 2/15/2010 7: 07: 00 AM Remove this comment

    Poem: 21085528 - What is it to me
    Member: Pratheek Praveen Kumar

    Comment: 'Life is full circle journey to be carried on
    With half hearted attempt no battle can be won'
    - 'What is it to me'.

    Very poetic and pregnant with insight.
    I read your all 459 poems and enjoyed them all,
    but ones like 'What is it to me' stand out for
    their wonderful expressions.

    Also appreciated your charming expressions deep
    from heart in 'Sister-in-law'. Truly revealing and
    enjoyable. Let god give you good luck with your
    sisters-in-law. Good luck.


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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (2/16/2010 8:08:00 AM)

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    Poem: 20428372 - Jealousy
    Member: Joey Valenzuela

    Comment: love: hate
    good: bad
    ....and for me.......
    jealousy: acceptance

    jealousy results chaos...either deep within or physical.
    on the otherhand if 'acceptance' is present you wouldn't be envy for anybody, because you can accept that you are not as good as the other.....

    the poet criticizes jealous people by setting the point of view to himself, because more probably, the author don't want to hurt them..insult them...

    why the jealous people wont be hurted? ..
    its because they'd feel that they are not alone, and feel pity to someone like them...

    the author disguises himself as one of those jealous people to criticize them and at the same time not to be hated by those said jealous people....

    actually, the approach of the author is intellegent...and he presented good ideas....no, not just good but best ideas....the author is full of wisdom...i salute him on that....

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (2/7/2010 4:25:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 2/6/2010 9: 28: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21286019 - Unknown factor
    Member: Seema Chowdhury
    Comment: sir thankyou for sharing this wonderful piece with all.
    it reflects the depth of your thoughts and experience.
    valuable lesson to be learnt from this.

  • Maia Padua Maia Padua (2/4/2010 10:27:00 PM)

    back to stone age....nice to imagine how is life being there...
    back to medieval times...back to the past


  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/31/2010 4:25:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 1/31/2010 12: 09: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Fay Slimm
    Comment: Woman and the womb which bears the race who inhabit this planet deserve every line in this careful tribute which outlines the immensity of the task. Thank you friend.

    Date & Time: 1/31/2010 12: 05: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21216605 - Crusade or struggle
    Member: Fay Slimm
    Comment: Musings on life my friend take us to all sorts of conclusions and this well constructed rhyme is an example of poetic musing around the subject while there is still time.10 from Fay

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/30/2010 10:01:00 AM)

    Re: Crusade or struggle (Score: 1)
    by angeroseblue on Saturday, January 30,2010 (10: 32: 43)
    i enjoy your poems
    you put forth a lot of effort on them and
    it shows deeply
    Great! ! Very Happy

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/29/2010 7:07:00 PM)

    From : Vp Ramesan (India ;)
    To : Hasmukh Amathalal
    Date Time : 1/29/2010 1: 44: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject : comments

    Dear Hasmukh,

    Poem 'Miss' was heart-rending. It is the wail of a lover who loved for his lover's gesture ho didn't turn to his advances. It is a platonic love which the opposite side never take notice of. Such instances are many among men and women. I share your sentiments that I too had undergone such situations. The poem is emotional as well as flowery. I give you ten marks for your poem.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/28/2010 11:20:00 PM)

    Re: Sentimental fool

    Postby MoonStar Rose » Thu Jan 28,2010 11: 42 pm
    Oh I so liked this Jadia. Your viewpoints were right on and made a valid point.. I think many of us look on Intelligence as a Superior thing and for many it scares them to be among those with a higher level than theirs.. They will down-grade those, calling them names to make them themselves better in their minds.. Fear is a strong factor with animals too. I think they are very intelligent creatures.. Maybe more so than the human mind. Look how they travel in packs, have to endure such treatment of all different elements and yet they still survive. For they lack one thing us humans have in our thought process. That's fear! they fear nothing, all they have to contend with is staying alive.. I envy their way of thinking.. Their logic and find such beauty in their perseverance..

    Well done my friend..

    Moonie xxx

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/28/2010 9:33:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 1/28/2010 9: 16: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Almedia Knight
    Comment: great honor to a Woman's womb, Hasmukh. Just as mother earth gives life to all forms and keep all forms in balance...without complaints. Women give life to human with love...just as mother earth give life to all forms but is often violated and or mistreated, like women. The creation story has placed man as the dominant power over all life form so, not until the present 'male' god is replaced or presented genderless, there will be little or no respect for the womb of mother earth or the womb of women. Nevertheless, mothers, lovers, and wives love our men just the same because we are the givers of life.

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/28/2010 6:57:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 1/28/2010 4: 37: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Ridha Abdellaoui
    Comment: Hello Hasmukh!
    I was surprised to see that you have about (439) poems. That means you are a proliferous poet. Frankly, I am not able to read all of them at the moment. I just start with 'Woman's womb'. In its theme it is well chosen for 'Woman is half a society' as we say in Tunisia.
    Here I would like to comment upon both the 'good' and the 'bad' points of your poem. First it is good to start your poem with the four opening questions:

    'Why woman is forced upon to bear a child? '
    'Is it because she is so gracious and mild? '
    'Is that whole universe is so proud of her stature? '
    'Is she paramount factor that she cares not for her future? '

    That is great to draw the attention of the Reader / Listener to your problematicity that will be solved throughout the intervening verses but please pay attention to the grammaticality of:

    'Why woman is forced upon to bear a child? '

    Please pay attention to the inversion rule in questioning. Many poets mis-interpret the poetic license which is another matter.
    In general your poem is of great value but there is the problem of 'Directness'. In poetry one should avoid that otherwise his / her 'poem' will lose its essence.

    'No one should violate her modesty or simply dare'

    That looks like a legal order:

    'No driver should park here or dare'

    You see there is no difference between your verse and this prohibition sign!
    There are many other verses that should be re-formulated.
    Finally, this is but an opinion with all my respect and encouragement.

Best Poem of Hasmukh Amathalal

Miss ', I Really Miss (101) /500 ###

I was stepping in to become young
I thought it is nice journey but too long
I am afraid and take care not to go wrong
I was expecting everything for song

I am so much influenced by lady smile
She has entered in life just before while'
Life seems to be so interesting and fine
I want to dance on floor with glass of wine

Miss, you can't be so rude
For a word you have made prelude,
All warmth and affection you have included
Hate and distance you have excluded

I never expected you to cast
All doubts but trust should not last
You were the ...

Read the full of Miss ', I Really Miss (101) /500 ###

I Lived Not

I lived not up to expectations
Thus raised distrust and many questions,
Had promised to keep words,
In the name of God and also Lords,

Promise is simple but after all promise,
To be observed till approach of demise,
Never to forget any and not to compromise,
Not to break any just to sprang surprise,

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