Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 675,610 Points [Mehta] (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Hasmukh Amathalal Poems

2641. With An Answer 5/4/2014
2642. With Anger And Anguish 5/6/2014
2643. No Wrong 5/7/2014
2644. Love Not For Sale 5/9/2014
2645. I Open 5/10/2014
2646. No Amount 5/11/2014
2647. On Rise 5/11/2014
2648. Nothing Is Wrong 5/15/2014
2649. Not Gone Far 5/18/2014
2650. Love Is Natural 5/18/2014
2651. બીજા બધા વગડા નાં વા.. bija badha 5/18/2014
2652. मुझे रास्ता दिखाएगा mujhe raasta 5/28/2014
2653. Love Color 6/3/2014
2654. Her Living 6/3/2014
2655. Lifw Is For Us 6/3/2014
2656. At The Shelf 6/4/2014
2657. Friends Are 6/4/2014
2658. Women Know 6/6/2014
2659. Real Greatness 6/7/2014
2660. Your Side 6/8/2014
2661. હસી લે છેલ્લું છેલ્લું.. Hasi Le 6/16/2014
2662. Even Barren Land 6/17/2014
2663. Oh, No One 6/18/2014
2664. Not Force 6/21/2014
2665. In My Ears 6/22/2014
2666. Just Nicely Behave 6/23/2014
2667. Far End 6/24/2014
2668. Not Bound 6/25/2014
2669. Single Factor 6/26/2014
2670. Our Own Action 6/26/2014
2671. Concern 7/8/2014
2672. ગુજરાતી શાંતિપ્રિય અને શાણો..gujarati 7/8/2014
2673. No One Shall 7/13/2014
2674. Life Shall Not 7/13/2014
2675. Our Peace Kite 7/16/2014
2676. Lovely Association 7/17/2014
2677. Be Beautiful 7/20/2014
2678. Leave Anchor 7/21/2014
2679. My Views 7/27/2014
2680. Divine Gift 7/27/2014

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/27/2010 7:35:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/27/2010 9: 25: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21967348 - A dead end
    Member: Rajkumar Mukherjee
    Comment: Dear Hasmukhlalji,
    Thanks for your invite to read and rate your poem 'dead end'
    We are perhaps sailing in the same boat and as such our feelings match
    This is the time to introspect through our life's journey and share the profound knowledge with the younger generation.
    Your poem is a journeyin the same direction.
    The rhyming pattern of the poem is fine maintaining AA/BB pattern but no of lines you have exceeded the meter length.
    You can easily correct those by using a few imageriesor metaphors
    I find the meter counts of stanza 2 as most appropriate for this type of poem.
    A few friendly suggestion-
    1) S1 L2- a typo 'know' should bre 'known'
    2) S1 L 4 can be changed to 'no one may learn how much I succeded' This wil also create an inter-rhyming with third line.
    3) S 2 L 3 'AT' can be deleted as superflous.
    LIKED THE POEM. RATED HIGH
    Rajkumar

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/25/2010 2:03:00 AM)

    Poem: 21096246 - Woman's womb
    Member: Zafar Tahir
    Comment: Hasmukh gee adab:
    Same blood same thinking:
    Fist lesson we were tought was; there is heaven under the feet of mother:
    That is start and end of this worthy state of our being.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/23/2010 7:34:00 AM)

    Poem: 21934573 - All answers
    Member: John Knight
    Comment: Hi Hasmukh - A very interesting and philosophic poem. V 1 Highlights the fact that 21st C Man is very materialistic and also very dissatisfied with what he has. V 2 The Holy Scriptures say 'Godliness with contentment is great gain'. V 3 We need to consider the situation of the AVERAGE MAN in the World. He has so litle compared with what we have in the UK. A comparison woulld soon make us 'Count our Blessings' for what we take for granted. V 4 A soft life erodes our resisitance and 'The moral fibre is lost'. V 5 In order to have less stress and a degree of mental peace we need to be less of the 'Now Generation' and take a long - term view. V 6 Ambition is a good thing - but it needs to be in persective. V 7 'Rejoice and participate in the thing in the natural way'. We need to take some risk - but we can't fly - remember Icarus. V 8 What great advice and what a great ending 'Doing what comes naturally'. Joy - self fulfillment - satisfaction - no pain - no rejection - So let it be.. Thanks for sharing. yours in poetry - JOHN.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:32:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 06: 00 PM

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    Poem: 17742708 - A place called
    Member: Bethany Williams
    Comment: Such beauty in a great poem. Great words used in this poem.. I had such a great time reading this....10+++

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/21/2010 12:30:00 AM)

    ate & Time: 3/20/2010 9: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21897681 - A 'Papa, please'
    Member: Elna Mercado
    Comment: my eyes grow wider, my heart beats faster......my childhood....in your lines.....tears.....
    as a single mom, i consciously chosen not to do as it was in my childhood but i must confess, i did....the feeling was horrifying, hunting. i have written an apology to my son when he was 13.....waited for forgiveness.....when it did, gratefulness is so sweet...

    parenting is very difficult and i read you struggle with that too....when we go deeper within and recognize what is going through, it become our strength and guideline for change and /or modification what we can do for the next time...

    you write so vividly with emotions that move a reader.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 8:56:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/19/2010 1: 50: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21861341 - A trouble in offing
    Member: Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK
    Comment: ‘…Love is after all God’s gift and can’t be had at paying prize
    I accept it as simple divine shower and happily summarize ‘

    Fabulous finish … true Love now-a-days is as rare as pure Heart

    We’ve lost that heart and ….egoic [selfish] with preponderance of egotism… I’m the best …
    Before marrying or falling in love we must read good poems as primer to make us receptacle of Love
    10++

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/19/2010 5:29:00 AM)

    Date & Time: 3/18/2010 7: 36: 00 AM

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    Poem: 21874612 - A different challenge
    Member: Will F. D. Blackman
    Comment: I liked the way you built on the notes
    played from line to line. Not all storytellers
    are poets but all poets are storytellers.
    A very fine job telling this one.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/17/2010 8:24:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/17/2010 8: 22: 00 PM

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    Poem: 21874612 - A different challenge
    Member: Sridevi Datta
    Comment: Don’t cry for somebody’s action and fault
    It might have been insult and somersault
    You got to forget and brace for new lease of life
    You may prove very good mother and honored wife
    yes....at some point of time...we need to put our past behind us and stop blaming ourselves...that will liberate us in the real sense.

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/14/2010 11:52:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/11/2010 7: 06: 00 AM
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    Poem: 18181249 - Anywhere you like
    Member: Adnan Khalifeh
    Comment: Nice one........I like most of it........Especially:
    We exchanged so many pleasantries,
    No distance seemed between ocean and countries,
    Neither mountains, hills nor any boundaries,
    Eyes met and said to one another,
    Was it not necessary before we marry?
    He was hesitant for slight moment,
    I offered my self for holy deal,
    I was there for his wounds to heal,
    With only condition for him to be real,
    Waited for approval for the final seal
    ...................
    Yours truly,
    Adnan

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/14/2010 11:51:00 PM)

    Date & Time: 3/11/2010 8: 49: 00 AM
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    Poem: 21725273 - A 500th poem
    Member: John Knight
    Comment: Hi Hasmukh - Well done! ! 500 is a big bench mark - never attained in age but in some thinga attainable - 500 runs in cricket - 500 postage stamps in an album - 500 paintings and for some 5oo poems. But how - you ask - is this possible. Your own creative brain - yes - but also the one who held you - your family - your friends - you readers - your commentaters and last but not least GOD (V 7) . Without God we are nothing and can achieve nothing. I like the linguistic structure and the rhyme and the rhythm. The first six verses look back and the second six look forward to the 1000th. To continue (V 8) to flow freely (V 9) to find space
    (V 10) to strive hard (V 11) and to go with the natural flow (V 12) . Thanks for sharing - yours in Poetry - JOHN

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Best Poem of Hasmukh Amathalal

Miss ', I Really Miss (101) /500 ###

I was stepping in to become young
I thought it is nice journey but too long
I am afraid and take care not to go wrong
I was expecting everything for song

I am so much influenced by lady smile
She has entered in life just before while'
Life seems to be so interesting and fine
I want to dance on floor with glass of wine

Miss, you can't be so rude
For a word you have made prelude,
All warmth and affection you have included
Hate and distance you have excluded

I never expected you to cast
All doubts but trust should not last
You were the ...

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Behind Clouds And

Behind clouds
26th March 2019

Not the beautify alone
but silvery lines
you possess
and deny an access

I am deeply sunk

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