Jessica Carlson

Rookie (6-19-90 / Omaha, NE)

Comments about Jessica Carlson

  • dissatified exmember (2/22/2005 1:24:00 PM)

    Jessica you are letting your feelings show. Thats wonderful. You are only 15 years old and in time, if you enjoy poetry as much as the people on this site do, you will learn skills that show you how to express yourself in different ways. Read as much poetry as you can and then you will see what I mean. You will get ideas of expressing all the great stuff you write.Then you will be able to put it into better poetic form.

    Keep it up. You will be a great poet if you take advice and use what is given

    Hugs
    Jan

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  • Poetry Hound (12/23/2004 7:12:00 AM)

    You obviously have a lot of emotion. But writing your emotions down doesn't automatically make them poetry, or rather it doesn't necessarily make them good poetry. The emotions you convey are similar to what many many people experience. So I would try to convey them in some unusual or non-typical way. That way you get readers to see things differently from their own emotional experience and what moves readers is relating to the emotion but seeing it conveyed in a somewhat different and more interesting light than what they typically experience. Make sense? Anyway, it's just my two cents.

Alright?

I wish that I could move on
It wouldn't cause so much pain
Manipulated by the system
I don't want to die like them
This life isn't what its
cracked up to be
All I wanted was out
All I wanted was peace
But when I took solice in the knife

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