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Francisco R. Albano 29 July 2008

This statemental poem is good. Revise and remove grammatical and syntactical errors. Republisb. 1st stanza line 4. Remove 'A'. 3rd stanza line 1. Remove 'to'. line 3. Change 'bliss' to 'blissful.' line 5. 'Coz' is baduy. Change to 'Because.' 4th stnza line 1. Change 'cause' to 'causes' (singular) 5th stanza is unintelligiblr because syntax is wrong. Revise last two lines.

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