Kaishai Crescent


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  • Poetry Hound (2/15/2005 2:02:00 AM)

    I admit that I have no idea why you post your journal entries on this site. And that's what your poems read like - very self-absorbed journal entries. And they look like they come from a mind that has had extremely limited exposure to great poetry. If you look around, you'll find that your poems are very similar to the poems submitted by many other adolescents on this site. Just about every day there's a poem contemplating suicide. It's so predictable. I suggest that you familiarize yourself with the well-established poets on poemhunter - the ones listed at the bottom of the home page. Read them and let them influence you. Then maybe you'll be on the road to writing some original poems.

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A Shattered Life

All along, I thought I was alone forever...
Then you came along...changing the weather.
A friend to forever be with me inside,
Together so I am not lonely when I hide.
Though sadly, time had come upon us,
Death tolls becoming a must...
A killer, purely very cold at heart,
Had came and tore us far apart...

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