yoonoos peerbocus

Gold Star - 10,872 Points (05/08/1941 / Mauritius)

A Baby's View Of Abortion - Poem by yoonoos peerbocus

I came as tomorrow
Swaddled in innocence
To your warm womb
Mother……
Without your choice
Or mine
Destined to up date
With time
Our human tree
But before love
Grew into flesh and words
What is unfinished creation-
A precipitation of blood
Became my transcendence.

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Comments about A Baby's View Of Abortion by yoonoos peerbocus

  • Sasmita Rani Nayak (9/26/2017 1:36:00 AM)


    But before love
    Grew into flesh and words
    What is unfinished creation-
    A precipitation of blood
    Became my transcendence.

    Great description of brutality. Thanks poet.
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  • Sanjukta Sahoo (9/15/2017 8:30:00 AM)


    Great poem dear poet. (Report) Reply

  • Anita Aparajita Das (8/27/2017 1:21:00 PM)


    Without your choice
    Or mine
    Destined to up date
    With time
    Our human tree
    But before love
    Grew into flesh and words
    What is unfinished creation-
    A precipitation of blood
    Became my transcendence.

    Beautiful poem on abortion.
    10
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  • Mohit Katyal (8/17/2017 12:32:00 PM)


    Its an unique topic.. Hats off.. Well done (Report) Reply

  • (8/12/2017 8:16:00 PM)


    so touching. so powerful. This poem just made me cry because I could relate to the message. Keep writing. I am touched by the insight in these three lines. (Report) Reply

  • Abekah Emmanuel (8/9/2017 8:26:00 AM)


    Short but powerful piece of art.

    Regardless of the perspective from which abortion is viewed from, I believe it is to a large extent, unjustified.

    Unlike Brian Johnston who cites biblical argument from the 'original sin' to debunk the innocence of the child, I believe that killing him/her alone denies it(the child or foetus) the opportunity to be born again and receive Christ. This can be summarised in other words as killing a sinner, definitely you will account for that act- that is if someday we shall all be judged. On the other hand, whether the child is innocent or not, once it has life, taking it is both illegal and violates his natural right as a human.

    Using whatever means to convert a human to a 'precipitation of blood', is wrong and must be condemned. We may resort to it under uncontrollable circumstances, but our inability to avoid it, should not deceive us into accepting it as part of social norm or alternative plan whenever we face challenges with regards to child birth.

    Yoonus has captured this well. Keep it up!
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  • (8/5/2017 10:18:00 AM)


    NICE POEM URGING PEOPLE TO STAND UP AGAINST ABORTION LOVED IT (Report) Reply

  • Marguerite C. Anderson (8/4/2017 1:02:00 PM)


    Giving voice to the unborn child makes this poem graphically disturbing. Destroying an unborn child may sometimes mean destroying a promising destiny. (Report) Reply

  • (7/27/2017 12:32:00 AM)


    Lucky baby, saved from a horrid existence by its non-mother, especially in the case of an unwanted baby.
    Hats off to all those who have utilized the level of intelligence possessed only by the human species to prevent the suffering by preventing birth and who have overcome social conditioning and the so-called biological programming.
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  • Mohit Katyal (7/15/2017 12:08:00 AM)


    Explained in a meaningful manner.. liked it (Report) Reply

  • (7/11/2017 1:11:00 AM)


    Telling this story in the first person made it real for mz km. Made me sad. (Report) Reply

  • Sheryl Deane (7/8/2017 3:57:00 PM)


    A meaningful account of a sad event (Report) Reply

  • Akram Saqib (7/2/2017 1:24:00 AM)


    But before love
    Grew into flesh and words
    What is unfinished creation-
    A precipitation of blood
    Became my transcendence. all appreciations are small thing for your this poem. i would be glad to give you 19
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  • (6/27/2017 3:10:00 PM)


    I clearly see, you are pro life the exact same way as yours truly. Where would we be right now if our own mothers decided to abort us? In heaven, of course, but not on earth. Terrific poems! (Report) Reply

  • Conley Murray (6/19/2017 10:36:00 AM)


    That is a great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Pritam Bhowmick (6/9/2017 11:08:00 PM)


    A powerful thought beautifully expressed! (Report) Reply

  • Brian Johnston (6/7/2017 3:43:00 AM)


    While I think the poem definitely takes sides Bri (swaddled in innocence is certainly a loaded phrase) . Even the Bible says that all men (and babies) are born sinners and that God's love is all that saves us, not any innate innocence. And oh yes we all die too. Without an immortal soul does anyone really transcend anything? Are we not all unfinished creations yoonoos? (Report) Reply

  • Stuart Munro (6/4/2017 1:37:00 PM)


    A baby formed by uncaring parents who have an abortion
    Never becomes a conscious life form outside the mothers body we think, or know a babies mind
    Any moron of a man can carry the seed, any moron of a woman can conceive, , it's no great skill parenthood
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    Rosh Noln (7/27/2017 12:37:00 AM)

    Most people are born as the by-products of uncaring parents... it is a case of mostly morons producing more morons that is going on around us. Pleasure is the only thing they seek in life.

  • Bri Edwards (5/12/2017 1:20:00 PM)


    i like this comment:

    Moira Cameron
    Moira Cameron
    (3/9/2016 3: 49: 00 PM)


    I like that this poem doesn't appear to take sides; it is just an imaginative and powerful of the act.
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  • Bri Edwards (5/12/2017 1:18:00 PM)


    this is not a word i use or am very familiar with:

    tran·scend·ence
    ˌtran(t) ˈsendəns/
    noun
    noun: transcendence; plural noun: transcendences; noun: transcendency

    existence or experience beyond the normal or physical level.
    the possibility of spiritual transcendence in the modern world
    synonyms: excellence, supremacy, incomparability, matchlessness, peerlessness, magnificence; rare paramountcy
    the transcendence of love
    ======================================

    i don't believe in God. Rini (below) mentions brutality of mankind. seems to me, from my youth as a church-goer, that God was pretty brutal at times, and He/She/It [if in fact H/S/I existed/exists] did allow
    mankind to be brutal at times.

    the idea that life is 'sacred' is not one i share with you undoubtedly.

    maybe abortion is God's will. maybe God noticed the mistake made by getting one set of parents
    pregnant. so God decided to allow/cause an abortion (or miscarriage, or stillborn birth, or childhood disease
    or accident) to 'take' the baby and place it into another womb where it might have a better chance for a 'good
    life'! ! ! !

    but, except for the word transcendence, i think the poet made his point.


    bri ;)

    to MyPoemList for possible future reference.

    favorite lines:

    I came as tomorrow
    Swaddled in innocence
    To your warm womb
    Mother……
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, March 27, 2007

Poem Edited: Sunday, September 10, 2017


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