Now don't say that. I thought your structure was just fine. Structure makes a poem easy to read. That's what your poem was. I enjoyed reading it so much
that I actually wanted to read more. Your message was clear and sincere.
I could feel the heartbreak. Just a wonderful writing.
I like the last line, and when I started to post my poems, everyone tried to tell me that it was written wrong. Poetry today tells about our lives, and what we are going, or have gone through. This is a very well written piece and says so much about why others don't listen when we talk. Thank you for sharing, but I believe that there is someone out there for a girl like you.
if you know how much you wanted to die, you would not be broken all over the place, , so, before you get sad, read frank stanford, then rethink all your poems, cause they just aint sad. maybe that is what is dragging into the open fire, because you must beware of the passenger, you must DO DAMAGE TO the BRAIN WHILE RAISING A FLOWER OF FIRE, nice try except to the fact there is something wrong, but i am not bob dyland, just a funkey uselss american