surya surya

kozhikode, @chennai.india
surya surya
kozhikode, @chennai.india
Tuesday, August 18, 2009

A Lesson In Swimming*. Comments

Rating: 4.3
(*when a young girl ventures out for her
first class in swimming she should briefed
on consequence of body baring as well
as likely presence of paedophiles) .

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surya surya
COMMENTS
hiii 08 January 2021
wow much pedophile
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Vipins Puthooran 06 November 2011
Wow, , , it's an amazing write and a great poem, , , wonderful emotions so real it's... Top marks! ! !
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Mark Nwagwu 13 April 2010
unpleasant experience; spoils the purity of swimminmg water - that bathes the body, lifts the heart to see the sky.. and maybe even dream. Swimming is more than just moving in water and splashing around, it is an elixir purifying our blocked sensations. The crude coach does not understand this...though
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suddenly it seemed water is hot and boiling, quickly they moved to change room, where he bared her nude, it was her curiosity and his anxiety! .. it is transmission pure ly arrival of spring in her body and eqquall response.. lovelytgheme....10 read mine... i miss... miss i miss u
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NOTE OF CONCERN: This poem is vilevoguish mindset of swimming teachers…and Sr. Poet Surya Sir explicitly narrated and expressed the agony and insult to femininity…what may stay stored in subconscious …and many give many psychical problems …later on…very much concerning…and poets are looking glass of society and reflect the blacks and whites as they’re …here ably done by poet.. In this poem often unnoticed area poet has reflected…be safe the parents and learners…, my humble concern echo with the poet Ms. Nivedita UK
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Ghastly! ! Grisly! ! ! Gruesome! ! ! ! Macabre? ? ? ? WHY WHY WHY? ? 10+++ Ms. Nivedita UK
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Walterrean Salley 26 December 2009
If you're going to swim - swim. If you'r going to shop - then shop. If you're going to work - work. Don't lose your focus in life because bad things can happen. Good moral.
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Alandra Moreira 31 October 2009
powerful and in the beginning you don't really suspect then ending until the second stanza, great write!
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Adi Cox 01 October 2009
I was drawn into the poem and the seduction of a beautiful young girl. This is what dreams are made of. What makes this poem good is that it highlights an abuse of power: The coach that takes advantage of their students. This poem appeals to the most basic instinct of being male and shows just how easy it is to slip into bad ways. Excellent poem.10/10.
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Sonya Florentino 27 September 2009
a lesson in swimming? did I miss something? ;) hope she learned something though...whether bad or good....
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Dr. Sonal Chhaya 26 September 2009
Happens all the time.................. Good try.........
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loki thredbald 22 September 2009
The first stanza was well done although the second stanza lacked the subtlety that could have made tis poem great instead of merely quite good.
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Antonio Liao 22 September 2009
what a guts.....its suspense to some and surprise to other....its a bird flying knowing that it has feathers, as the fish looks so fantastic.... wow! both has experience in different way yet! unbelievable to say....as it grow tells, us the truth that life is an awesome to see beautiful poem with a point to tell...Thank you my friend..... God bless a 10 +++
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Cat Tiger 21 September 2009
Not a poem but an exercise in eliciting response. Shame.
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Anand Madhukar 18 September 2009
I've rated it 9 for the beautiful 1st stanza. The 2nd stanza however falls short of the mark, its unsubtle and the word Anxiety doesn't convey what you probably wanted to convey.
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Almedia Knight-Oliver 18 September 2009
Your poem is a bit of a puzzle but here are my comment: 'A lesson in Swimming' seems to be a lesson of a young girl coming of age in the water of innocence- instead of curiosity- with a swimming teacher who knows the lesson well.This is the lesson I got from your poem. Moves from the hot waters to another room?
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Amitava Chakrabarty 18 September 2009
A good one in its content and in style, well.... a bit prosaic.
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Arjun Singh 18 September 2009
a gud one well try buddy.....bt somthing is missing.....i m also confused wat is missing.....bt overall......gud wrk
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Aekg Navrilith 17 September 2009
Fave line: 'suddenly it seemed water is hot and boiling'
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Dagmara Anna 06 September 2009
Interesting and well written. I like it. DA
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