Tuesday, December 25, 2007

A Mouse (Haiku) Comments

Rating: 3.6
moon shadow
the little gray mouse
edges toward the cheese

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Ben Gieske
COMMENTS
Ramesh Rai 17 October 2014
This reflects the natural phenomenon of life. Nice.
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Dr Hitesh Sheth 14 March 2009
In wintry night cat catch the crying mice is it tears or dew............... Good write........
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Ben,5th place? -your haiku should have been in first place! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! a ten from me...
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Anjali Sinha 13 January 2009
wow a lovely haiku mouse edging to cheese -10 anjali (read mine too haikus of love)
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Kesav Easwaran 30 October 2008
nice one..a 'koo'ing image on the moon and the cloudy spread...10
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Estrella Baldemosa 29 June 2008
a good haiku...poet is not self -absorbed and discrete from the object, a real haiku...
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Chris Mendros 25 May 2008
This is as good a 'ku as i've seen on here. What else is there in the mouse's world, but that cheese? Watch out for the- (SMACK!) ...
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Duncan Wyllie 25 May 2008
MOUSEY PUT YOUR CRASH HELMET ON FIRST LOL! Thanks Ben Love duncan X
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Eithne Queen of Celts 19 April 2008
It's the goal of every haiku, that of expressing a whole universe in a few short lines.I love this one.It made me feel in the shoes of the little mouse.There is no one to stop me from getting what i want (the cheese) .But is it moral, is it right to get the cheese?
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Francis Duggan 06 January 2008
A beautiful haiku this one Ben well done
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Nimal Dunuhinga 28 December 2007
Oh! What a beautiful poem? This resembles me Takuboku.Ishikawa.
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Rachel Flint 28 December 2007
ALL THE TIME TRYING TO AVOID THE CAT... CUTE POEM!
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Alison Cassidy 25 December 2007
A delicate poem in exquisite taste... love, Allie xxxx
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