Tuesday, September 22, 2009

A Mysterious Crow! . Comments

Rating: 4.3

a crow, charcoal black, fierce eyes, blue
saturn ring in neck, beak dense black
sharp, arrived mysterious from nowhere
sat on a tree branch bearing mangoes

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surya surya
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Aparna Sinha 16 November 2011

Read it again..wow what a piece

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Albert Price 01 February 2011

I feel a relation between grandma and the mangoes.

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wow..what a nice plot! ! ! ! a sad one..love this poem wid ma heart....thanx...10+++

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Sphinx came back but granny went out…nicely conceived but gosh yet true….such happens in our lives and your poetic eyes perceived it… Offbeat canvas …is it under para-psychology …for coincidental occurrences…? 10+ Ms. Nivedita UK

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when returned home, on surprise wailing of mother, they found to great shock, grandma had flown away with the mysterious crow! ......sometimes they forcast large loom of worst fears.... i believe in it.. simple but great work......10 read mine black crow

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Jasbir Chatterjee 10 November 2009

fantastic imagery! Thanks for sharing! I also lost a loved one recently and your poem gave me something to think about!

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Jayram Daya 03 November 2009

Black is just void of colours. That is why we dislike it and associate with a mysterious world. So is death. The crow is yet a fascinating bird. I liked the plot.

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Jester's P 23 October 2009

'a mysterious crow! ' as the title presented it- the description of the creature crow by the author. and it (crow) is by the way associated to dark secrets (shadow of evil/death) , in fact in my own tribe we regard it a fatal bad omen...why, because of its awful noise and dark color. well nice poem it is indeed mysterious because i cannot explain why the crow regarded as what i mentioned above (poor creature) . all the best...

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John Mcmanus 21 October 2009

this poemleft me feeling a bit confused like I wasn't ure what to fell by thwe end of it but you kept me engaged the whole way through.

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Joseph Poewhit 21 October 2009

Interesting poem with some ending

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John Shea 18 October 2009

A really great read. Please read my poem Feathered tears, thanks John.

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John Knight 18 October 2009

Hi Surya - An interesting poem - in the UK crows are treated with caution and, because they are so jet black - as harbigers of death. Verse One introduces us to a rather scary crow - Charcoal black - dense black - mystreious from nowhere - pecking furiously at the mangoes! In Verse Two you focus on the occupants of the house - particularly Grandma. Was this myterious Crow a harbinger of her death? Their vigil is broken in Verse Three - A shattering sound - a falen barnch - a departing crow - Family rushing into the Courtyard. There is so much movement in this verse I found myself quite breathless just reading it. Verse Four compounds the mystery. When they go back in the house to comfort Grandma - she is no longer there - 'Grandma had flown away with the mysterious Crow! ! ' Is this a euphamism for death 'Flown Away' or had she acctaully been translated to Paradise? This happened to Elijah and others so it is not unknown in History and Folk Law. Gradmas are wonderful do they get an automatic entry to Paradise - I would like to think so! It is an amazing folk poem and has given all who had read it a gentle thrill of the mysterious and the unknown. There is a message - don't despise the crow - take heed to his omen - I score it TEN. Yours in poetry - JOHN.

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grandma had flown away with the mysterious crow. Surya, I liked your dramatic sad story, in spite of the sadness I enjoyed it, you chose the suitable metaphor; Crow is a symbol of death! ! ! a great symbolic poem. 10+++

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Swatimalya Chattopadhyay 11 October 2009

Surya, the themes of your poems are always unique.A few which I have read are alien to the general concepts but each adorned with a powerful message.This happens also in real lives and once we experience this, we start having a hunch of good omen or bad omen at the sight of something new and strange. Very nicely brought out.

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Poetic Soul 07 October 2009

I appreciate the whole metaphor, and the connections of dreams and reality. Well expressed.10/10

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G. Murdock 07 October 2009

Dear Surya, I loved this poem of the mysterious crow. It is seated in our imagination and the iconic connections of dreams and reality. Jung would say the crow because of its color and size would be a forboding symbol and represents the mystery of dying. The bird represents the symbol of spiritual release or the longing of freedom and if we have dreams of flying it is to escape the rigid and trying bonds of life. There are many meanings in this poem and I'm not suprised to find the immediate identification of death. We are as a human race given the cognitive machinery which is strangely similar to all others of our kind. Humans have symbolically catloged life's experiences in dreams and it is not suprising to me the symbols are universal in many cultures. Thanks for sharing, George

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Irfan Salimi 07 October 2009

Nicely penned and a great poetry...........I loved.............voted.

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Ency Bearis 07 October 2009

a good metaphor verses...well presented.....10

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Indira Babbellapati 06 October 2009

such things happen only in india...how does one account for these instances or if there z an expressionb like co-incidents?

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Harish K. Thakur 06 October 2009

In almost all parts of India crows are disliked because of their calling for the bad omens, Surya depicts the same quite vividly with a strong mataphor of spiritual transformation towards the beyond unknown.

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