Saturday, March 7, 2009

A Silent Sight Comments

Rating: 5.0
a fleet of birds
in the sky
forming an arrow
cutting across the wind


Samanyan Lakshminarayanan
~ Jon London ~ 13 March 2009
Silence is golden, like the ink that was used here to write this fine piece
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Ravi A 10 March 2009
A very nice idea and well versed also. Enough poetic flow. One is quite natural. The other is man made. This is the difference. We live far away from Nature and this is the trouble. The cave man was quite natural in many ways. We have lost it due to sophistication. Natural flexibility of our senses is gone with the so called civilized ways. We know only the smell of perfume and not the aroma of a nascent born baby. We know only the rock and roll music and not the whispering song of wind. Instead of 'the bird', use 'birds'. Best of luck
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Ramesh T A 10 March 2009
I too have seen such wonder in the sky many times and written poems on white birds doing such a feat! A nice poem to muse over!
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Indira Renganathan 10 March 2009
That is the difference between aagatha and anaagatha..i.e nature made and man made...good poem indeed10
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Seema Aarella 10 March 2009
A very intelligent thought, birds driven by by power and potential....very good interpretation....! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
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Salu Salu 10 March 2009
fine observation......beyond rationale n reasons, beyond philosophies n logics a lot happen in the nature...........cute you related both in uniform..........rgrds/salu
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Joseph Poewhit 09 March 2009
A watched a flock of geese and wondered at there symetry
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Lynda Robson 09 March 2009
We copy from the birds, it is wonderful to watch a flock of birds flying in formation, well written as always, 10 Lynda xx
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Dr Hitesh Sheth 09 March 2009
Men corrupts what nature endow us with.................. Cutting the branch on which he sits........ Good Write...........
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Fay Slimm 09 March 2009
The contrast used in this verse is both moving and thought provoking - - and there is a pulse running all through which provides flow...... an excellent write and a pleasure to read of such perception in poetic word. ....... a 10 from Fay..... with best wishes....
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Greenwolfe 1962 08 March 2009
Your piece brings on many thoughts about man and nature. It is clear that mankind has learned a lot of lessons from nature. It is as if nature teaches man. This is a thought for man to be reminded of from time to time. A very important writing. GW62
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Kesav Easwaran 08 March 2009
it seems sky is the limit for your flying thoughts...good piece you have created here...words flying those birds in your write...10
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C. P. Sharma 08 March 2009
A thought provoking poem. Man has a tendency to immitate Nature and pose his superiority. But during the process delinks from the source resulting into catastrophe. CP
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Ency Bearis 08 March 2009
great analogy write of instinct and natural ability into poetical concept..10
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