A Sneer-Like Laughter Poem by Mehrdad Dadkhah

A Sneer-Like Laughter

Rating: 4.0


A hearty laughter followed my
So called frozen heart.
A response. A threat. Or maybe beg.
It engulfed my soul in cocoon-like cage.
As it tried to imprison my bits of sanity that remained.
So walked my broken body faster than before.
I would never let shadow swallow me whole.
A wishful thinking it was or not I am unsure.
Yet it was repeated thousands of times
Like hymn brought forth.
My body was twisted and so was my soul as it was castigated by what we call norm

Lo! I stopped to listen. Lo! I'm no more.
Know I'm being forgotten. Yet now I laugh more

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Ok! I am totally a newbie. What I am asking is for your opinion about this poem (I don't even know if it can be called one in the first place lol)
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
David Wood 17 May 2023

2. You can write a nature poem about trees, flowers or the moon glistening off the ocean at night and the stars. They are good topics to begin with.

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David Wood 17 May 2023

Not bad for a first attempt at poetry. Might I suggest that you write about something you own and love, or something you like. Writing about live snd self are the hardest poems to write.

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Mehrdad Dadkhah 17 May 2023

I'll be sure to give it a try. Tnx for ur positive comment it meant a lot to me. Actually writing poems in English is a hobby of mine that I cherish alot but as anon-native I have many short comings

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Silver Bird 16 May 2023

congratulations

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Silver Bird 16 May 2023

'A hearty laughter followed my So called frozen heart' is a captivating and introspective poem. Through its skillful use of imagery and symbolism, the poet explores themes of self-discovery, defiance, and the transformative power of laughter.

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