jathin aka jesuzz

Rookie (23-dec-1987 / india)

A Vampire’s Dilemma - Poem by jathin aka jesuzz

Motion eludes my conscience
Sublime realities dawn
Dark figures in the ocean
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Comments about A Vampire’s Dilemma by jathin aka jesuzz

  • (10/12/2013 8:09:00 AM)

    A good write, well done (Report) Reply

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  • Anita Sehgal (10/12/2012 12:35:00 AM)

    dilemma well brought out.. powerful words.. (Report) Reply

  • (3/27/2009 10:39:00 PM)

    Hell! This is a love triangle
    Bare bodies of deceit
    Surround a soul elite................wonderful dilemma.........Good Write............
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  • (3/27/2009 2:21:00 AM)

    sleeping in daylight and hoping to live by the darkness of night...well, many human minds are vampire like...artful poetization of the theme inside...10 (Report) Reply

  • (3/27/2009 1:42:00 AM)

    very strong verses I may say it is a love dilemma and with the line breadcrumbs lead to nowhere is the right words to describe how we feel lost and hopeless sometimes.. (Report) Reply

  • (3/26/2009 7:32:00 PM)

    I particularly enjoyed the image of the 'Sublime realities' dawning. For me the poem is about an insomniac, who starts having hallucinations, heads off to sleep, catches bits of sleep here and there and hopes to feel the sweet release of sleep. I could be wrong but thats my interpretation. Your style seems a little abrupt, each line is about a different subject matter rather than expanding on the line before it, not that thats a bad thing.
    Good stuff
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  • (3/26/2009 11:44:00 AM)

    A complex but enjoyable poem...Well done Jathin,
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  • (3/26/2009 11:07:00 AM)

    A very innovative poem, well penned,

    Lynda x
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  • Concetta Neville (3/26/2009 10:56:00 AM)

    I really enjoyed reading this. Great job. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • (3/26/2009 9:01:00 AM)

    very creative, imaginative...a different theme... (Report) Reply

  • (3/26/2009 7:38:00 AM)

    one more day to hope......lovely. very nice and imaginative poem. keep up the good work. take care (Report) Reply

  • (3/26/2009 12:04:00 AM)

    the virgin silence succumbs
    beautiful phrases and great imagery
    -10 anjali
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  • (3/25/2009 11:40:00 PM)

    nice flow... very njoying is the way u hv written it down... :) (Report) Reply

  • (3/25/2009 9:29:00 PM)

    I gave you a 10 for the surrealistic picture you painted.Try my Kann Abels Restuarant And Walking in Twilight, let me know your thoughts. Also, if you read My Angel, print it for Mothers Day if you like, thanx (Report) Reply

  • (3/25/2009 9:08:00 PM)

    Whoever said a vampyre does not dream?

    Kindov sick of the vampyre movement personally, but this was good after it's fashion. I liked the imagery regarding the bubble the most. It was well said.
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  • (3/25/2009 7:41:00 PM)

    Nice poem, very creative! (Report) Reply

  • (3/25/2009 7:35:00 PM)

    nice poem i like it its very expressive and shows alot (Report) Reply

  • (3/25/2009 6:56:00 PM)

    I really like it, but i agree with the other comments, im confused by the message, its a vague, i do like it, it really isn't a critisism hell my 'poems' are truely awful! it is good but the message needs to be clearer! (Report) Reply

  • (3/25/2009 6:54:00 PM)

    Nice poem. Very to the point. (Report) Reply

  • (3/25/2009 6:49:00 PM)

    I luv it
    what messages you are sending?
    I dont get it
    its was great
    its kind of scared and mystery
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