Monday, December 5, 2005

Barfly: Woman In A Bar Comments

Rating: 4.8

a broken neon sign flashed Mel’s
atop a small darkened bar
on the edge of town


Cj Heck
Con Nie 13 April 2007

Sad this is the way it is at times in bars across the land. Always wonder about the stories behind those women and the men, too. Good poem. Sincerely, Connie Webb

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Rev. Dr. A. Jacob Hassler 06 December 2005

a bit of a departure from your children's poems, but well rendered. it's refreshing to see you branch out. Jake

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Michael Shepherd 06 December 2005

Sharply observed, well told, non-judgmental..and spiders too! Unbeatable, CJ!

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Uriah Hamilton 06 December 2005

Thanks for this glimpse of darkness, well-written with good images.

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Hugh Cobb 05 December 2005

CJ: A tight, well constructed poem. Vivid description and atmosphere. I enjoyed this journey, though it seems dark compared to some of the other work of yours I have read on this site. I like the multidimensionality! (10 from me.) Hugh

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Rusty Daily 05 December 2005

As always CJ, your poems get to the gut of it. A multi-talented poet your are Rusty

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allan james saywell 05 December 2005

yes i'v met women like this in bars a great profile of my first wife well done ohhhhhhhhhhhh yeahhhhhhhhhhh

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