I did not know
In which train you went;
But my deep breath
Brought your train back.
(In Tamil- Mazhaippen-Kavigar.Phazhani Bharathi)
your deep breath brought her train back and she filled the space of your thoughts; yiur eyes met and the train took off again. liked this a lot, anushma
So much meaning in such a brief poem! Touches the heart.
Brief, but soul stirring
Brief but complete, and nice. You might want to convert it into a 'Naani' poem (Indian Telugu poem) of 20-25 sylallbles spread in four lines. Your style fits well into that.
If she is your soul mate you can easily reach her with your thoughts and make her come back this must be a spirituel love, otherwise love may be come to an end
had written my comment earlier; now it's gone. Like this piece a lot, the train went and your thoguhts brought her back and now the wheels of love can roll again, and again, just keep breathing, arushma
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