Diane Hine

Silver Star - 4,143 Points (25 July 1956)

Buying A Car - Poem by Diane Hine

I wanted a car when I wearied of walking.
With savings in hand, I left home to peruse.
The dealer was helpful, bright-eyed and fast-talking.
He offered two models from which I could choose.

The first looked immaculate, surfaces gleaming,
compared to the other, defaced by a scratch.
"The price is the same", said the car dealer, beaming.
I deemed him unscheming, so asked "What's the catch"?

He mumbled and hemmed as he opened each bonnet.
I missed all his words, for the squeak of the hood.
While first engine, seamless, had no mark upon it,
the other was patchwork of iron and wood.

The first car, he promised, would cause me no worry,
the makers long trusted with local renown.
He offered a test drive, said "No need to hurry,
as long as you stay within limits of town".

I took up the offer and signed on a paper.
The engine was purring and swift to respond.
But being a person who's fond of a caper,
I passed the town's limits and ventured beyond.

From then on the engine desisted from purring.
It coughed a smoke hairball and came to a halt.
The dealer arrived with a tow-truck, incurring
a fee charged to me since he judged it my fault.

He frowned and seemed puzzled, said "If you must ramble,
the other car's needed for leaving our town.
I have to inform, you'd be taking a gamble.
It's not a smooth ride and it sometimes breaks down".

I nodded and said "I accept the conditions",
then paid him in dollars and signed in the space.
And that was beginning of my expeditions
which took me here, there and all over the place.

The dealer told true, there are frequently glitches
with rattles and rumbles and things that go ping.
Mechanics repair it with staples and stitches,
or bright shiny gadgets or widgets or string.

I sometimes pass towns where the locals are driving
their own perfect models which never give strife.
Though bound to their towns, they appear to be thriving,
but this car will do, for a wandering life.

Comments about Buying A Car by Diane Hine

  • (1/30/2018 6:43:00 AM)

    what car tho! ? ? ! ? ! ? ! ? ! ? ! ? ! ? ! ? ? ! (Report) Reply

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  • (6/30/2015 10:42:00 PM)

    just about to get one myself. thanks for the tips (Report) Reply

  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (6/28/2015 6:11:00 PM)

    A creative poem my friend! (Report) Reply

  • Damian Murphy (3/3/2015 4:27:00 AM)

    absolutely brilliant! Great scene rhythm and rhyme (Report) Reply

  • Galina Italyanskaya (2/6/2015 3:03:00 PM)

    Absolutely love this poem! (Report) Reply

  • (11/4/2014 8:54:00 PM)

    sounds like the carburettor,
    at least that was what brung mine down
    just before the first red light in town
    (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins (6/11/2013 12:03:00 PM)

    nice write with a lot of humor good job Diane (Report) Reply

  • Akanksha Bhatt (10/8/2012 10:21:00 AM)

    enjoyed every line! and a nice test drive ha! ! ! ! ! :) cool....! (Report) Reply

  • (9/9/2012 8:00:00 AM)

    This is soooo good, Diane, and what fun to read! ! (Report) Reply

  • (9/6/2012 10:14:00 AM)

    Sounds like quite and adventure - in both ways. Like my brothers always tell me: 'Whatever works.' And I hope that this one works for you for quite some time. Happy venturing. Great poem, well written. (Report) Reply

  • Mark Dillon (8/30/2012 10:49:00 PM)

    A great funny bumpy ride Diane (Report) Reply

  • (8/29/2012 8:31:00 AM)

    A great poem. Those that venture beyond the town limits and engage in an adventure with mishaps and resilience to repair and progress while others safe within town limits are safe but unchallenged. So often the takers of risks without perfect preparation are amply rewarded by the riches of experience a great allegorical piece and the people we meet that apocryphally may inadvertent inspire us or direct our course, perhaps a metaphor for retirement or altered direction. Well done and good luck with your continuing journey. (Report) Reply

  • (8/29/2012 7:27:00 AM)

    Enjoy your drive with your new car, Diane. an interesting story! (Report) Reply

  • Valerie Dohren (8/29/2012 4:34:00 AM)

    Great story Diane, hope you have many happy journeys in your new car jalopie! ! (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (8/29/2012 3:37:00 AM)

    I wish you a wonderful expedition in your car with no serious hitches to satisfy your wander lust! A very interesting read! ! (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilson (8/29/2012 2:33:00 AM)

    A fantastic write, hope you and your car have a happy long wandering life together. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, August 28, 2012

Poem Edited: Monday, March 11, 2013

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