Dorm # 812

Rating: 4.1

your letter peeks out
from in between my bookshelves;
you have no idea how much I need you.

I refuse to falter to stumble or
I refuse to say I love you.

Springtime in Malibu,
we lazed on your dorm room floor
& supped root beer and vanilla stoli—

blurred silvers blues and yellow hues
played in the ocean’s palette
as I dared too far over your balcony.

we walked to a concert on the lawn
but the line was so long,
I awaited you with an idle impatience.

Leading me down
to the frothing embankment,
sandaled conversation fell by the way….


the letter now, exposed & hanging,
escapes the confining white pages
of dead authors.

the cool wind blew in from the
called me home.

Still I’m drawn to your soft strength
of such guidance
such courage

I’m too young to be reminiscing.

Geoff Warden 15 August 2006

Sus an ecellent rite....dorm 812 will stay eternally.....

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Will Barber 07 August 2006

The flow of image, color, emotion in this work are simply gorgeous. A wistful, beautiful write. Never to old to reminisce, Sus - a very good aid to remembrance of youth in later life - which keeps you young. I admire this poem extremely. - WB

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Tailor Bell 07 August 2006

tremendously paced and curious about your influences. Awesome. -Tailor

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Ulrike Gerbig 07 August 2006

oh my god, sus, your poems...i love them so... they make me...feel, think, remember, live! thanks for sharing this, u.

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Anna Russell 07 August 2006

There's a really breathy quality about this. I love your talent for injecting beauty into sadness. And that last line is great. Hugs Anna xxx

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Chris Mendros 30 April 2007

Dittoes to what everyone said. Strong emotions, and a revelation, too. Nice work, a[s us]ual.

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Xxx Xxx 13 September 2006

i was appealed by the sci-fi title...the text is exploring the self of the author, i like this, who would do this without inner strenght...From my little point of view, this is well done sincerely

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Uriah Hamilton 20 August 2006

you're certainly not too young to write a great poem! ! ! This one's a killer! !

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Dan Tharp 19 August 2006

Oh no you're not to young... there is always something to look back upon with fond memories. dan

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Michael Shepherd 16 August 2006

..Beautifully evoked..

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