thomas coltrin

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Dream Or Reality...? - Poem by thomas coltrin

I saw her there, with bloodshed eyes
Without her feet she seemed to rise
All around her were just flies
And a smell I did demise

I wasn’t sure of what I’m seeing
Inside my head I was still sleeping
Dreams can be so fucking real
Things aren’t always as they feel

She said she couldn’t really sleep
She said she went too far too steep
She couldn’t feel her arms, her legs
She said she had too many drugs

My blood went straight down to my feet
When I saw this glowing heat
Coming of her pure white skin
A face, a smile evil grin

Her hair stood up strait in the air
Words repeated like a prayer
The room I was inside, was gone
Outside I saw the braking dawn

Everything was different now
The dirt beneath just wasn’t ground
The air once light, was now to thick
My smoker lungs, just couldn’t breathe

As my body hit the ground
My soul departed far beyond
I saw a light beyond description
No words not even in the scriptures

I saw her their beneath the ground
My eyes just opened really wide….
Looking straight up at the ceiling
I turned my head
I saw her there with bloodshed eyes
Without her feet she seemed to rise


Comments about Dream Or Reality...? by thomas coltrin

  • Ravi A (4/27/2010 12:18:00 PM)


    A good narative poem. You have neatly expressed your feelings but the last stanza - I did not really get at the theme. Perhaps, in half sleep, you might have seen the rotation of the fan and felt a woman's bloodshed eyes without feet...etc. (Report) Reply

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  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (4/9/2010 10:36:00 AM)


    Dancing between dream and reality. A tremendous theme my friend. (Report) Reply

  • (4/7/2010 10:49:00 PM)


    very well written good job (Report) Reply

  • (4/7/2010 7:45:00 PM)


    I say it was dream and horrible one and very different one in gd way
    Amazing job 10++
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  • (4/7/2010 2:57:00 PM)


    I like it. but i agree with pamela... (Report) Reply

  • (4/7/2010 2:29:00 PM)


    I’D SAY THAT THIS WAS A DREAM, A NIGHTMARE. (Report) Reply

  • (4/7/2010 2:15:00 PM)


    She said she couldn’t really sleep
    She said she went too far too steep
    She couldn’t feel her arms, her legs
    She said she had too many drugs

    sweet poem with a good logic is this one..really enjoyed it..well done 10/10
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  • (4/7/2010 2:10:00 PM)


    woahss! !
    awesome! !
    it seemed like i was watchin a movie (:
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, April 7, 2010

Poem Edited: Thursday, April 8, 2010


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