rio monica canlas

Rookie (July 20,1985 / Kabacan, Cotabato, Philippines)

Grateful Daughter - Poem by rio monica canlas

You wake up early, every morning
To assist us in everything;
To touch us with your caring hand
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  • (9/29/2007 6:44:00 AM)

    a heartwarming poem. made me miss my own mother. come to think of it, i haven't written anything about her.

    the poem flows in continuity. the stanzas support one another from beginning to end. nice way of starting the poem from the time the mother wakes up 'to assist...in everything' and ending it with the daughter's expression of gratefulness. the poem tries to encompass everything about the mother in six stanzas. although it is not clear why the grateful daughter says she misses being with the mother. perhaps 1-5 stanzas should be written in the past tense? i think the last line could've been written in a better way, something that will give the poem a more dramatic, lingering effect. and the slang 'coz' for 'because' sort of ruins it. still a good work, though. just sharing some feedback, if you don't mind. ps: i liked the line 'you are better than paracetamol'. i think all mothers are. especially 'pilipinang ina.'
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