Loke Kok yee

Haiku-A Snake - Poem by Loke Kok yee

A circle writhing
Smaller and diminishing
Snake makes bad mistake

Topic(s) of this poem: nature

Form: Haiku

Comments about Haiku-A Snake by Loke Kok yee

  • (11/9/2017 6:31:00 PM)

    That was a awesome haiku (Report) Reply

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  • Bri Edwards (3/19/2016 5:18:00 PM)

    i ain't a haiku expert, but i think this one hits the spot! ! !

    nature and descriptive. i think the snake was just having a bad day.

    bri :)

    re other comment below, maybe big instead of bad, though i think it IS a bad mistake also. some dumb boa?
    well, it can't hurt to send to MyPoemList, can it?
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  • (11/23/2015 3:58:00 AM)

    The snake consuming self.....Very thought provoking Loke......10 (Report) Reply

  • Seema Jayaraman (11/3/2015 3:53:00 AM)

    Is this an actual picture? How did the snake make such a mistake, a witty write and you have a picture to support it too.. ps. I think perhaps if you remove 'bad' from the third line, will make this a perfect haiku fitting the 5-7-5 syllable meter, though I am still a student learning technicalities of haiku. thanks. (Report) Reply

    (11/3/2015 7:29:00 AM)

    I put in thebad to make it 5

  • Souren Mondal (11/2/2015 7:43:00 AM)

    A very witty and profound thought.. We are often the architect of our own destruction.. Thanks for sharing.. (Report) Reply

  • Sanjukta Nag (11/2/2015 1:36:00 AM)

    Oh nooo! Deep thought. We all are same more or less. (Report) Reply

  • Kelly Kurt (11/1/2015 12:04:00 PM)

    We all bite ourselves at one time or another. Just not literally : -) (Report) Reply

  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/1/2015 8:49:00 AM)

    Ha ha ha....It is like teeth biting tongue.....Witty Haiku. (Report) Reply

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (11/1/2015 8:47:00 AM)

    Wonderful haiku shared on snake that amazes mind really. Wise in thought you are...10 (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, November 1, 2015

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