Simple English sentence. (subject, verb, object of verb.) * (noun/verb/noun) in that order.
Looking another way,1st person " I" that's subject. Verbs: action/ Objects of are things
Great poem by the way. But it need wok of the English. It must sound great in the native language of your country. The translation needs work even in the use of poetic devices as forms of figurative use of language to turn the phrasing, .
a poet friend
RH Peat
vow! indeed a great write and i can feel your agony. words ring in to my mind as if a reminder. i love the lines
'I no longer dance with rain
Dewdrops do not quench my thirst
I could not talk to the flower now
That bloomed in all its mirth
Sea makes no sound to me
As it meet the shore
Sky does not take me in its arm
And mountains do not lure'
thanks for sharing
voted 10
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surya
Beautiful creation fueled by frustration!
I know exactly what state you were in when you penned down this poem. I have experienced it too. Sometimes we feel that we are just surviving! I feel that the most befitting title for this poem is 'I am not myself anymore.' By now I think that you must have got over it. Come what might never give up your beautiful craft and whatever you feel about yourself, never destroy your poetic creations. They are a masterpiece. I am saying this because I have seen most artists destroying their creations doubting their worthiness.
Let me repeat it once more... You are a blessed poet.
A sweet 10.
you are a poet...and you would continue to be so...beautiful piece Aparna...i am able to listen to the sound of your streaming words down the mount of imagination there...thanks...10
YOU ARE AN INBORN POET. I DEDICATE IT TO YOUR POETIC QUALITY:
YOU ARE THE POET OF POETS
YOU REMEMBER ME JOHN KEATS
YOUR FRUSTATION MAKES YOU GENIUS
YOU ARE A TRUE POET TO US.
YOU ARE NOT THE JUDGE OF YOURSELF
ONE CAN'T PROPERLY JUDGE ONESELF.
YOU ARE THE BUDDING POET WITH QUALITY
WE BOW DOWN HEAD WITH DIGNITY.
YOU WRITE POEM AT THE CORE OF YOUR HEART,
YOUR POEM ENSLAVES OUR HEART.
Oh such a terrible loss of time so far - for me and for poemhunter.
If her words are so powerful even when she feels she is not a poet anymore, I wonder how much of poetry we would have missed to record when she was One :)
Great write dear.
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