Tuesday, July 12, 2011

I Wish Comments

Rating: 3.5

I wish I can die
I wish I can live
I wish I can take
I wish I can give.
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Tai Chi Italy 12 July 2011

If wishes were fishes, we'd all be down the chip shop! sings to this poetic mind. You gave a very good rendition of a poets torn thoughts here! I particularly liked this verse, however, I would edit out that 'h'. I wish I can end it to cease to exhist, these thoughts penetrate, they seem to persist. It rhymes very well All the best to you with a smile from Tai

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