I Wonder! ! Poem by lou lou

I Wonder! !

Rating: 4.5


I look at the moon and wonder are you looking at it to
I see a shooting star and make a wish and hope that it comes true
I catch a raindropp on my hand that’s fallen from the sky
If I could be anything for a day it would be a bird so that I could fly higher then high

I love the way the grass feels between my feet
When the sun shines on you and feel the summer heat
I like the way silk is soft to the touch
I love the taste of ice cream you can never have too much
Id like to be a dolphin for a day to swim lower then low
I love to wonder about these things but some ill never know! !

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Random Crap 11 August 2007

A nice poem with some really interesting ideas. However the last line of the first stanza, doesnt seem to fit in with the theme of that stanza. The rest of it was about nature / weather things. Try reoranging your lines so that each stanza has its set theme. If your struggling to find rhymes, use online rhyme dictionarys, they can be really helpfull! x-x-x

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