CHARMAINE SIMPSON

Rookie - 18 Points (19-06-1969 / Adelaide - Australia)

I Would Regret - Poem by CHARMAINE SIMPSON

Regrets they ask? ?
would I have regrets if your body was finally put to rest?
yes I most certainly would-
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Topic(s) of this poem: family, father


Comments about I Would Regret by CHARMAINE SIMPSON

  • Fil LeBoeuf (9/20/2006 6:18:00 AM)

    Your welcome for the help! I hope you can see the difference. I am particularly awestruck about the line 'I grew to loathe you as I lay in silence- wide awake' Such a powerful image! I also probably have a strong positive bias towards this poem as it reflects, perfectly, my mothers life growing up with an alcoholic father. She still struggles with many of the events touched upon in this poem. Not sure if you as the poet, are also the speaker here, but I can feel every bit of emotion in this. I'm e-mailing it to my mom...i'm sure she'll appreciate it. Oh and perhaps you could take a read of my poem '0.55% Alcohol' if you're keen on poems with alcohol abuse and such.

    Take care Charmaine! (Pretty name btw)

    ~Fil
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  • Fil LeBoeuf (9/20/2006 4:59:00 AM)

    A powerful poem, although with the beginning of each line starting with a capitol letter it throws off the reader a bit. If the content in a line directly after a phrase is continuing an expression, help the reader along by not capitalizing the beginning letter. You enjamb your lines well, but the effect is lost on the capital at the beginning: D In the 2nd line of the 3rd stanza 'to sleep alongside of my dad' I don't believe that 'of' should be there.: D Just trying to help.

    Its a shame the speaker had all this spilling over...sounds like they have needed to say these things for a long time.

    On another note, please read my poem 'He Loves the Bottle' sounds like you could appreciate it. I look forward to reading more of your poems! !

    ~Fil
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  • Kee Thampi (9/20/2006 4:17:00 AM)

    Sadness that I am unable to now express with clear intent
    As you even managed to destroy my ability to feel
    Each of these emotions as they should be felt
    Anger became my replacement for sadness, anxiety and fear, the anger
    the poet made a vibrant poem with a exclaim and a barb of her void life and love
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  • Ashish R (9/20/2006 3:25:00 AM)

    A very strong poem.
    Ashish.
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  • Jimmy Watkinson (9/20/2006 2:48:00 AM)

    Shocking indeed and highly moving. Your language is strong and you deserve much credit for this powerful piece. Utterly and amazingly moving indeed.

    jw
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