Friday, July 31, 2009

*in The Afterglow, A Couple Sleeps Comments

Rating: 2.9

Sunlight through the slanted shutters
Lay stripes across her breasts,
Bars across the sheets,
Precise angular lines of shadow

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Lillian Susan Thomas
COMMENTS
Shashendra Amalshan 14 August 2009

wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww This is so very passionate indeed.. lovely to read.. very visual..you painted the scene well.. this is sweet and lovely, I am kinda lost for words after reading this one.... nice.. with lots of lovesss shan

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Susan Jarvis 09 August 2009

This awesome arrangement of carefully selected words conjures and almost photographic image before the reader's eyes - a beautiful and sensual image. And then there's those two closing lines, which somehow manage to touch the heart with a message deeper than the visual experience. I love it! S :)

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tom mc quade 31 July 2009

...lovely..lovely..lovely...such a convincing gentle depiction.. :)

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