Tuesday, May 15, 2018

Mount Pleasant Cemetery Comments

Rating: 5.0
There is something strange
About naming a cemetery Mount Pleasant
After all, it is a place
Where the dead are momentarily


Raymond Farrell
John Beaton 15 September 2018
HI, Raymond. Having done student jobs as a grave-digger, I identified with this. In contrast to the egalitarianism of Elegy in a Country Churchyard, You begin with the fine irony of the name then reveal how the layout spreads from inner circle to those on the fringes. But you also make the point that it's all futile- graves, however grand or humble, are in time forgotten as life goes on. There are echoes of Ozymandias here. Nicely done.
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Raymond Farrell 15 September 2018
Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and for your generous comment.
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Bri Edwards 22 May 2018
(cont.) ...cemeteries (some) have been favorite spots in which i've gone bird-watching! tombstones make good perches for bluebirds and phoebes looking for passing insects to catch and KILL! to My PoemList. bri :) p.s. keep wondering about those kings and queens!
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Bri Edwards 22 May 2018
(cont.) ... I highly doubt the real poor Ever made it inside the iron fence.............SURE THEY DID! they ARE the ones mowing the lawn(s) ! ! ;) i mowed part of Mount Hope Cemetery in Rochester New York USA when i needed a little extra money. (cont.) ..
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Bri Edwards 22 May 2018
to keep the verb tense, as already used, and keep the nouns plural, i'd suggest changing Is the same one held in death to Are the same ones held in death. i'm liking the poem so far. but i DO like the name of the cemetery. [[ i may end up in The Dust Heap Cemetery! ] (continued) ...
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Raymond, a well expressed commentary. The bones beneath laugh at the ashes. As they are still life.++10 Ps correct the heading
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Raymond Farrell 15 May 2018
Thanks for reading and commenting. The correction in the title has been made. Thanks for pointing out the spelling error.
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