Saturday, January 14, 2006

My Illusion Comments

Rating: 4.9
Just stand in my field of vision
Don’t run, don’t hide
You don’t need to take a decision
Let me swim in your paradoxical sight

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Michael Sombrero
COMMENTS
Sandra Osborne 02 June 2006
Excellent! Simply Excellent. I liked the 'Too Much High' this conveys the right feeling. I will suggust you change the line: 'It’s the burning sun and the blowing wind' to 'It’s the burning sun and the blowing air'... But, all in all, I loved it. My favorit so far. I am adding it to my list. You are a poet.10++
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Kimberly Kastner 01 June 2006
The line 'too much high' threw me off a little-perhaps 'too high' would sound better. But other than that, great work!
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I like this poem. I like the sentence where you describes life as dynamic. Because it is. also the sentence So let me stay drunk to dream are pretty cool. a part of the poem remind me a little of my own poem 'False Art'. But maybe that's just me?
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Dee Daffodil 31 May 2006
Lovely poem...I like the part about just enjoy life. I sense that the message in your poems is that of unconditional caring...not necessarily 'love' (whatever that means...) but more like acceptance and support, and even adoration. Please tell me if I'm on the wrong path. This seems to be what I get from your poem... Hugs, Dee
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