Lyn Paul

Gold Star - 42,272 Points (17.03.1965 / Mt. Barker S.A)

No Thank You - Poem by Lyn Paul

No Thank You
The Tears grew
As I played, 'I've never been to me'
An hour drive seemed like eternity

I thought of all for you I have done
The window down in the hot sun
My tears built
And I felt NO guilt

For my feelings of sadness
For that 90 minutes
You showed no gladness

I listened to your every command
I moved your feet
I straightened your hand
I carved and fed you
Spooned you your pills too
Order after Order
You gave No Thank You

All I could think as I collected the food on the cutlery
Was of someone I could give to
Who would appreciate me

For I have been giving to this person for many, many years
Yet today she has, reduced me to tears
For I said to her just before leaving
My Mother passed away
She did not care that I was grieving

So No Thank You
In this lifetime, for all that I have given
Just accept, I will survive
Those who appreciate keep me driven

In this year I have lost my Family too
It helps to let those tears flow
Trying to find wisdom in the way my life grew

Copyright Reserved
Lyn Paul
14th December 2014

Topic(s) of this poem: Giving

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Life sometimes lets you down But you must get up again!

Comments about No Thank You by Lyn Paul

  • Loyd C. Taylor, Sr. (2/5/2015 4:56:00 AM)

    Good morning poet Lyn. Tis a sad poem, but true so often. I enjoyed, wish you the best. Loyd (Report)Reply

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  • Geetha Jayakumar (1/3/2015 4:03:00 AM)

    A Painful write Lyn and sorry to hear the words. Very true said in poets positive note. Everything fall on us so suddenly that one may not even get enough time to get up. Thats the fact. My mother survived cancer few months back and many worst things happened past year. Though I have been through most worst times.

    Still one has to get up and stand, which is most important in life.

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  • (12/24/2014 1:16:00 AM)

    A very poignant piece scripted with great emotion......Lyn.....and a very sensitive thing like ingratitude taken care of
    so skillfully........amazing write......10

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  • Diane Hine (12/18/2014 5:26:00 AM)

    Ah, I like the 'NO guilt' line - a wonderfully liberating feeling, not always achievable. (Report)Reply

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  • (12/14/2014 4:11:00 AM)

    This poem tries to handle a difficult situation, but I fear it falls short of succeeding. The language does not carry the heaviness of the subject with success. There needs to be here better diction and better clarity of thought.

    Some lines reads kind of strange and some do not flow. Well, enough with this!

    Try to fix this a little bit and you will have agood or better poem.

    Thanks for writing!

    Luis Estable

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  • (12/14/2014 3:34:00 AM)

    So sorry for your pain, it really comes thru in these hurting lines that you have so perfectly composed.
    Ingratitude is so hard to take.

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, December 14, 2014

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