Wednesday, July 15, 2009

~*obsessed~* Comments

Rating: 5.0

the way you smile with your eyes
keeps me so mesmerised.
those deep blue eyes like shining pools
makes me think of precious jewels.


londiwe buthelezi
Ty Colbert 18 July 2009

i really like this! ! 10! ! ! ! !

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Rory Hudson 18 July 2009

This is nice, Londiwe. You have managed the rhyme scheme well. I like the way the repetition works and the way you close it at the end.

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Ted M 16 July 2009

A lovely poem, with feelings expressed so well, Nice write from the heart. So simple, yet so emotional.10+++

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Catrina Heart 15 July 2009

well expressed thoughts and feelings...lovely poem crafted! ! !

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Ency Bearis 15 July 2009

a nice write and deeply coming from emotion....a basic ingredients in creating a poem... and this is nicely presented...the repetition of the stanza of being obsessed is a good intention to understand its objective of this write....good job...10

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Faran Khalid 15 July 2009

Very good poem nice feelings of love thats true love 10 plusss

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i really liked that. it really made me smile. that girl must feel so specail. you write from the heart witch i like. there should be no secerts when it comes to poetry. a 10++

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