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Ode To The Salty Tear - Poem by s.zaynab kamoonpuri

O' Salty tear, a mere clear drop that you are
You've emerged for a million different reasons
many of which only the shedder knows
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Comments about Ode To The Salty Tear by s.zaynab kamoonpuri

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (10/29/2017 6:45:00 AM)

    It is a great ode to salty tears. Deep and vivid. Powerful expression. When tears will come and will emerge with the salty sea no one can say certainly. You have inscribed here touchingly...
    Ah but thou art' a ceaseless ocean in reserve and store
    No one can be sure, he'll cry no more
    When you trickle down those sad upturned lips
    we know destiny perhaps made those painful slips!

    Thanks for sharing.
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  • Nancy Oyula (8/25/2015 4:27:00 AM)

    I'd read this over and. Nice one! (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (2/6/2014 10:02:00 AM)

    A Powerful poem from your pen.. How come I missed this beautiful Ode to the Salty tear.
    Poem is very deep and with beautiful rhythms as well...

    This poem left me wondered whether
    Is it the salty tears were spilled from eyes?
    or is the the deep thoughts were spilled from your heart?
    Made this poem wonderful....
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  • Melissa Robinson (12/31/2013 2:08:00 AM)

    Very deep and vivid.! Great work, it's a masterpiece. (Report) Reply

  • (12/4/2013 5:32:00 AM)

    very nice poem with such deep emotions in it
    i love the rhythms, it sound so good
    good work and thanks for sharing
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  • Aftab Alam Khursheed (11/29/2013 9:39:00 PM)

    joy and grief two kinds of dirt that comes out from the heart, cleaning device those two and tears a sludge...well writ and rhymed thank (Report) Reply

  • (11/29/2013 4:17:00 PM)

    great write sis. mature and deep feelings expressed. (Report) Reply

  • Kanav Justa (11/29/2013 6:06:00 AM)

    ... wonderful poem... truly justified the title of the poem.... loved the way you wrote the lines... (Report) Reply

  • Musfiq Us Shaleheen (11/28/2013 11:43:00 PM)

    very rhythmic... and beautifully written.. good work.. keep it up.. (Report) Reply

  • (11/27/2013 10:50:00 AM)

    A very passionate ode replete with optimism, especially the last two lines:
    and be such a buddy who never wishes to meet again
    the tearful shedder from whom you depart!
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  • (11/25/2013 1:06:00 PM)

    Very very good, I love nicely writen poem especially those who contains a lot of rhythms. (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards (11/22/2013 2:58:00 PM)

    adjective: unalloyed

    1.(of metal) not alloyed; pure.
    unalloyed copper
    (chiefly of emotions) complete and unreserved.
    unalloyed delight

    OKAY, i get it now...pure.

    i liked emotional waste and its rhyme. and grief-crowded heart. oops! it was grief-clouded heart.

    did you mean to have the break between these four lines? :

    You are the raindrops of a grief-clouded heart
    You do emerge when two lovers have to part

    Help your shedder turn over a new leaf
    so you're associated less with grief.

    i especially enjoyed the last stanza. i'll message you about the second to the last stanza, if i don't forget. :) bri

    as for the author's comment on a comment from 'stan' (below) : yes, ms. or mrs. or something feminine please, though i too would not have known the sex of the author, except that she told me! i would have played it safe and put mrs/mr/ms if anything perhaps. ;) and it's Indian lassie please, not Tanzanian lassie. [ i thought lassies were only Scottish girls, or collie dogs. ]
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  • Captain Herbert Poetry (11/20/2013 9:37:00 AM)

    Very nice picture of emotional tears. Great write! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (11/18/2013 1:31:00 AM)

    A wonderful poem. So true indeed...
    'You've emerged for a million different reasons
    many of which only the shedder knows'
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  • S.zaynab Kamoonpuri (11/17/2013 7:53:00 AM)

    That's odd, why odd? Wel thanx poetess/poet stan, but im not a mr. as im a lassie, poetess. (Report) Reply

  • (11/17/2013 7:01:00 AM)

    Yours is indeed odd for an ode.. However it is extremely effective, peculiar rhyme-scheme notwithstanding. I give it a ten because throughout the sad poem brings me joy, utter joy. Great work, Mr. Kamoonpurii! ! (Report) Reply

  • Hathy Tong (11/17/2013 5:11:00 AM)

    Magnificent. I love it. (Report) Reply

  • (11/17/2013 4:27:00 AM)

    What do you think of my poem I Went Down to Cherry Blossom Lane? (Report) Reply

  • Yasmin Khan (11/17/2013 4:18:00 AM)

    There must be something strangely sacred in salt. It is in our tears and in the sea. ”
    - Khalil Gibran
    a wonderful poem, kudos!
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  • Dee Corpolongo (11/17/2013 4:02:00 AM)

    Great words on a emotion that is felt by most of us.....at times. Love how you put it into a poem...
    and thank you for your comment on my last poem... hopefully, my dad sees it in heaven.....
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