Aditi Khandelwal

Rookie - 1 Points (December 27 1997)

Phases Of Moon - Poem by Aditi Khandelwal

She is staring at the full moon
A lonely lovely little girl
Her beautiful eyes smudged with tears
It's her age to think about Goldilocks and bears
And in her hair make soft curls
But she is an orphan, last time remembering the night of doom.

A man with perfect looks is staring at the full moon
It was his twentieth birthday the very day
People sang for him, but he could not hear a word
A dropp of tear escaped from his eyes like a free bird
Every time when on his bed he lays
He knows life will bring him happiness as a boon.

An old woman is staring at the full moon
Remembering her son who she doesn't meet anymore
Her face is full of lovely freckles
And she has dreadful paining ankles
But she knows, this moon will go with all sorrow from core
And there will be endless happiness in her soon.

Poet's Notes about The Poem

This poem is about how i feel every time after i see the moon. Here the full moon depicts lots of problems in life but as the full moon never stays for more than one night at a time, the same way problems never stay in our lives for a long time and we should know that every problem has a solution... We should just know that the dark night goes and a bright day comes..
Thank you :)

Comments about Phases Of Moon by Aditi Khandelwal

  • (1/20/2012 3:07:00 AM)

    Interesting... Did read it over more than a couple times. This is one of those poems that leaves one confused I guess: -) (Report) Reply

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  • (12/26/2011 6:56:00 PM)

    So poetic how you go from seine to seine, felt like I was traveling while reading this. Very vivid write.
    Thanks for the journey. :)
    I'll think about your poem the next time I look at the moon.
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  • (12/20/2011 5:10:00 AM)

    A sweet poem all the way enjoyed the loneliness is not slaughtered in this poem. Gr8 goingkeep it up. (Report) Reply

  • Vipins Puthooran (12/18/2011 12:11:00 PM)

    Aditi, 'tis a beautiful poem! !
    You are so talented! ! !
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  • Juan Guzman (12/11/2011 2:50:00 PM)

    I felt your feelings in every word, and loved every bit of it.
    What I hate to say is that even though it's good you have some sentencing problems.

    Example: 'it's her age to think about' if you write it this way your main subject is her
    age, you are basically saying her age is thinking. So I hope that you study English more so that

    The world can read your lovely poems without a hitch :)
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  • (12/10/2011 11:55:00 AM)

    too good really appreciate ur work keep more to come with this emotion and meaningful words aditi. would love if u bring more to read. (Report) Reply

  • Sayeed Abubakar (12/8/2011 9:47:00 AM)

    Very nice. Well written. What's your mother language, girl? Compose poems in that language. You have poetic genius, no doubt. (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul (12/8/2011 6:30:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem, you are talented in expressing the rare things..I like many reflection you shared here by looking the moon, the shadow it left on many people dream and life...Such a great moment to spend, with moon...i also like to watch night with full amazing right..and i am glad you do something beautiful and meaningful with it :) Keep it up and thanks for inviting :) _Unwritten SOul (Report) Reply

  • Bibhakar Dutta (12/5/2011 9:49:00 AM)

    What a beautiful poem! I think something happened with you in life and you have exposed it through your poem..... (Report) Reply

  • Hans Vr (12/5/2011 8:36:00 AM)

    Aditi, this is a very beautiful poem.
    Poetic expression of phases of life.
    There is a certain mystery about the moon
    a certain magic. Very well done.
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Poem Submitted: Monday, December 5, 2011

Poem Edited: Saturday, April 21, 2012

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