Search For Freedom Poem by Tareq Jalabi

Search For Freedom

Rating: 5.0


i feel so happy
being by your side
whenever near you
my smile i couldn`t hide
***
swimming away from you
i many times tried
but always to you
pulls me the tide
***
once the whole ocean
i completely dried
it didn`t work
coz to you i was tied
***
another on awave
i took a ride
thinking somewhere else
it will me guide
***
but drove me to you
with a gentle slide
i was shocked
and my mouth open wide
***
i kept holding on
till some glide
took me away
and i accordingly died

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Erin Ford 15 September 2009

your poem made my day a little better.it shows us how we all should search for freedom.

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Beatriz Luna 15 September 2009

I can really tell what you wanted to say about freedom. That we're all loking for it. very nice and also liked the rhyme

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Saane Pahulu 15 September 2009

really beautiful 10++++++++++

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Evaughn Gray 15 September 2009

Very unique poem you have written here. I love everything about it. ~ Hazel G.E

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Angelica Ayman 16 September 2009

great poem, , , , , like it so much voted 10++ thx for charring

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Medusa Waves 12 October 2009

its was so beautiful :) i really liked it-i hope you get to make more as you grow and flourish Regards, Afrodita

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Jo E 08 October 2009

I like it! :) Keep it up! Your good.. :) Sorry it took me a while, havent been on for a long time.. :)

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Kathleen Hintz 24 September 2009

i really liked this poem but a lil type for you is not to try so hard to make everything flow because then it doesnt sound as good if you just write how you feel and what you want then rough draft it make little changes then you will have something grande..

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Catrina Heart 23 September 2009

Destiny's game our fate lies......lovely vivid piece with fine rhymes........10

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Roxy Gonro 21 September 2009

It really shows how destiny finds a way. i love it

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