Alison Cassidy

Rookie (6th August,1945 / Melbourne, Australia)

Silent Commuters - Poem by Alison Cassidy

Walking the dog
through autumn's first mist
I noticed
five strangers
at the bus stop

A young female
in school uniform
awkwardly
studying her shoes

Three skinny youths
staring purposefully
and separately
straight ahead

And an elderly man
bespectacled and brief-cased
peering myopically up the road

As I passed this group of silent commuters
five pairs of eyes averted their gaze

And without warning
a local kookaburra
laughed uproariously...


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  • (3/9/2007 10:15:00 AM)

    Perfectly paced to give the reader a shock in the last stanza - and a great big smile :)
    Hugs
    Anna xxx
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  • (3/5/2007 8:37:00 AM)

    Got me again. Split my sides here Allie. Brilliant scene setting and timing. I saw it all and was wondering, just in the right state of mind to be shocked too! ! Loved it. Great writing. xx jim (Report)Reply

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  • (3/4/2007 9:41:00 AM)

    A fascinating poem picture of life in your part of the world.. I love the contrast between the gray mood of the bus passengers and the laughter of the Kookaburras. Write on, Allie.

    Love,

    Sandra
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  • (3/2/2007 12:45:00 PM)

    Yeah! bring on the Kookaburras, if laughter be the release from the grey mist, then perhaps
    we all need to stop and think of something that lifts us
    A brilliant pace and theme, I loved it
    Top Marks A Ten!
    Love duncan X
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  • (3/2/2007 5:57:00 AM)

    As a bus driver I particularly liked this piece. I recognise all those that occupy this poem, including the dog walker. No kookaburras in this part of the world but your writing brought their laughter clearly to my ears. (Report)Reply

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  • (3/2/2007 3:41:00 AM)

    Allie, powerful observation and wit! Sound structure that compels thought, too. t x (Report)Reply

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  • (3/2/2007 2:24:00 AM)

    My drummer friend has a favourite quote he repeats time and time agaim: 'It's only funny coz it's true! '. Love it Allie. (I myself have only been writing for 20 months but have yet to make any advancement.)
    Danny
    ; ¬)
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  • (3/2/2007 1:52:00 AM)

    This is a good poem and I like it! Bill Grace (USA) 2 Mar 07 (Report)Reply

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  • (3/2/2007 1:18:00 AM)

    The kookaburras saw the funny side of it all....

    Alison
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Poem Submitted: Friday, March 2, 2007

Poem Edited: Wednesday, January 26, 2011


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