When I Was Dying. - Poem by Prakash Mehra

What a touching lines? ? ?
Weren’t you aware of severity; didn’t you catch the growing bane?
Yet you let me die, and broke the cord.
Why did you leave me in silence, when I was in hyper pain!

Mehra. Your poem touched my sentiment. So simple...so soothing. Keep it up. (Report)Reply

i love it! great job! ! (Report)Reply

Yes, I like this Prakesh. Thank you.

(I try to steer clear of poems about God, alot of people on this site get very upset, and send rude emails! ! ! ! And they are usually very poor poets anyway! ! !) (Report)Reply

A dying man shares his last views well in the poem. (Report)Reply

Excellent poem! ! I really liked it so much..10.if you want you can read my latest poem.thanks for sharing... (Report)Reply

I give you the strength to rebuke the one that gave you the strength to free yourself from me P.M., and as A.R.T or any reflective teaching I would say this is an angry child, but account for the autism, and then again I was made to be a walking pin cushion, I just always hated needles (Report)Reply

i like it it was a good write, nice (Report)Reply

i love the change in emotion from the last two poems i've read. I love to read different emotions in several poems it makes you seem interesting so you've done a very good job so far. =] (Report)Reply

it has a very dark and powerful emotion that can be felt by the readers... it's a nice read! ! ! ^_^ (Report)Reply

Powerful and deep feelings written to form a message. Very strong and created with emotion. Touched with a hint of mystery, this is a piece done with some thought. Nice work. Debbie (Report)Reply

nicely expressed with strong feelings........the angel of death let you go to continue writing more poem in life's reality so keep writing more ............10++ (Report)Reply

Beautifully expressed. Very moving.... (Report)Reply

Strong feelings well portrayed. The scenery even better laid. Good story. (Report)Reply

I read the poem whole and i found that it's very true spically in the last stanza
good work keep writing..10 (Report)Reply

your bitterness comes across loud and clear...the pain is true and crystal...good write (Report)Reply

i love this. this explains alot. this explains more about feeling in life that i have i love this alot.10! (Report)Reply

You present us with a fresh look at this experience of dying which we all will experience only once and never be able to respond to. Poetry can be a healing experience. I hope it works for you. Love, of course, has its consequences, not always the desirable kind. (Report)Reply

A universal life experience poem, we can be left to die but someone comes along and breathe life back into us. I like this poem...keep putting pen to paper. a 10 (Report)Reply

i can relate to this poem.... i'm sorry you had to go through that but believe me, we all do..... however we continue breathing... it is my poem (to the angel of death) 's twin..... keep writing (Report)Reply

wow! ! ! ! i' m really sorry you had to experience that pain moment and i know how you feel and
it's very nice i like it (Report)Reply