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Rating: 3.5

you made me believe
you made me grive
you made me cry
i wanted to die
you brought me hope
you brought me life
now all you bring is the touch of a knife
my blood it runs as
deep as the sea
what kept it pouring

the lies you told me
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Herbert Nehrlich1 27 January 2005

Thank you Graham, for your observation. It is entirely possible that the nightmare is beautiful (remember the blonde jokes) and that she will eventually come up with a poem of some kind. As for you though, I don't have any hopes, sorry to say, some people just don't have it.Sometimes it can be aquestion of IQ.

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Poetry Hound 27 January 2005

Sure, keep writing. But try writing something original. This piece is so generic and has been submitted in slight variations by so many would-be poets that maybe we ought to just have one broken-hearted poem posted and then everyone can sign their names to it and we'll be done with it.

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Graham Leese 27 January 2005

Keep writing for yourself and ignore idiots like the one below All you need for progression is practice :) Graham

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Herbert Nehrlich1 27 January 2005

No wonder you need to hide your identity. What is this? A poem? H

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Kim Bond 12 September 2009

this poem is excellent

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Uloia Norris Moore 16 August 2007

Sorry saith I....James

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Leigh A. Hill 11 April 2006

ill be praying for you, but please, try writing something a little more original? you have lots of talent! just learn to channel it correctly! ~best luck ~starr

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Poetry Hound 27 January 2005

Not everyone is as thin-skinned as you, Mr. Leese.

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Graham Leese 27 January 2005

Poetry hound, if you dont like a poem, keep out of it negative critisism just puts the poet off thier new hobby where are your poems? show us how it should be done and whoever said that everyone that posts their poems on this site are poets some people like to dabble, some people like to vent i would PM you but you are a coward who hides

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