Writing Poetry

Its been a while since I've posted any poems on here - so thought I would pop over and post a couple. Have a read and let me know what you think.

Thanks in advance,

Kev

Just wondered if anyone could read some of my poems n tell me if any of them are any good! im not very good at knowing how well ive written! thanks, Rafia x-x-x-x

Can anyone tell me why my poetry is so bad?

Hi everyone,
I was hoping to have some of you read my poems or some of them and give me some feedback, I am more than happy to do the same for you
Love Gavin

please read my new poet (SCAR) oblivious..
thanks

Hi everyone. I'm an aspiring lyricist, poet, and conductor, and I was hoping to get some criticism from people on some of my poems. I've only got three so far, so it's really not too big of a deal.

By the way, if any of you know of any good poems that are powerful, emotional, and with deep meaning that would translate well into a chorus song, please tell me. I've been trying desperately to find a suitable piece of poetry to write a new song with, and I haven't found anything yet that has struck me as especially powerful.

Thank you very much,

Dan

so here's my deal, i would like comments on the stuff i have posted, (not much stuff, so it likely wont take long, eh) please feel free to insult

anyone.... give me some techniques about writing poems? ? /

critique needed! !

Why I wonder do I go home?
All I feel is empty and begin to roam.
I walk around as if I have lots to do
When in reality I haven’t a clue!
Sweep and Mop, Wash and Dust
Occupy my mind before I combust

I’ll go to the store, that’s another chore
Fridge is empty and I must fix that door.
Standing in the aisle I become undone
I have nothing but to purchase for one.
Oh there was a time I shopped for two
There was always this for me and this for you.
Aimless I wander, Aimless I buy
I know I need bread, maybe I should try rye?
You liked wheat, but that doesn’t matter
There’s another habit I must shatter.

What was wrong with the hinge?
And why is Home Depot so big?
Here I go remembering the past…..
Oh but wasn’t it fun, building that box
Me, wondering how long a dog’s pregnancy lasts…
Oh yes that’s right I’m here for what reason?
No. No. Paints aren’t what I am looking for
Ugh! ! ! You used to find anything for all seasons
Why is there no one in orange around?
Forget get it! Maybe I will just nail it down

Off I go in my empty car, to my empty bed, with my empty heart, and and an empty head
You know what though I have grown
I know I hate rye, I know over a door I will not cry
So off to sleep I will try
to dream of the times
you were at my side
and I hold your notes just so that I know
you were actually here, not a Van Gogh.

juss wanted some honest opinions on stuff that ive written..

Im hurting again,
Theres no other friend,
No one to share the pain with,
Wish i could just get on with it.

No one to tell me to stop crying,
No one there to save me from dying,
I think im finally giving up hope,
Maybe its time i listened to the call of dope.

If theres one thing ive learnt its that people lie,
We lie, lie, lie and eventually die,
Death is the only truth in this unruly world,
So embrace it my friends, Embrace it like GOLD!