(3/18/2008 8:27:00 AM)
i think a god poem is all about our good the poem is conveyed....... it doesnt matter if tis long or short. it should also be rich
(3/18/2008 7:58:00 AM)
i dont know about improving my poetry as i for one am a science student...... and i have no literature trainin whatsoever....... all i know is this words coe to me.. and i cant deny that i think i am getting better but ways of improving i really dont know...... need people to read mypoems and comment sincrely criticsm not minded......
(3/17/2008 11:03:00 AM)
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Well with my poetry.
I always use simple words to depict my point.
I want to upgrade my vocabulary on my poetry...but it's not really that easy.
So check out my poetry and please help me find out a way to solve this.Replies for this message:
(4/11/2008 8:58:00 AM)
I'm about the same age as you are. I'm young and I had trouble with using vocabulary that isn't 'simple' as you said. I started out using a thesaurus. Eventually I got to the point where sophisticated ... more
(3/26/2008 11:06:00 AM)
well thanks check out my poems 'This Mask' & 'The Loneliness' it really helped out....thnkz 4 the advice man
(3/19/2008 7:14:00 AM)
keep the words simple. upgrade the 'ideas' - if you have to.
(3/18/2008 7:52:00 AM)
k. how about i check out tours and you c ... more
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(3/16/2008 9:49:00 PM)
fantasy is set
in an ominous landscape, a dark world that mirrors our watery arms
and legs but not our muscular
THE PINK PANTHER IS EATING HER CHIPS :) SATISFIDED
(3/14/2008 2:45:00 PM)
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blah blah blah i for got how to wtrite a poem BLAH BLAH BLAH]
(3/13/2008 1:49:00 PM)
my mind- cant get away from the place it was born...
love and death as one, , ,
do you whant to climb, , , ?
but strange eyes look at my words with puzzeld looks.
if only it was one, known to be one, lived as one.
(3/12/2008 11:14:00 PM)
It Only Ends
a string of words may tie
what times divides
and fill the gaps
with better lives
what we had in our sleep
was not quite ours to keep
we gave back the sea
it's wavering knees
and the moon may have seen
it's own face in my dream
for only a moment
forever to me
(3/12/2008 6:52:00 PM)
Failed to notice
A serenity I have felt but fail to notice why
long vacations of unawareness have I been through
Ignorance is in thought and mind
Filter it with knowledge and enlightenment
A window of intention has awaken my eyes in absolute despair
A time card has been taken to influence and inspire
A life without destination is a life without meaning
Believe in self and you will achieve
A cocoon of ignorance I have experienced
Once in and forever out
I cast my wings out with the ambition to learn and progress
Graciously flying with a haste to change a world we despise
Time is viciously apparent and will end, immortality is at hand
give me your opinion please! ! !
(3/12/2008 6:13:00 PM)
I am now lodged between both desires.
Hanging above me the femine bough,
Leaning so far as to snap within
An instant of a Zephyrus whisper.
My boned pang as my fingertips tease
The mulberries, only for it to recoil in
Conceit. I crave for it to trap me, to crush
Me- but Boreas swiped the bloodstone fancy.
Swooping fiercely below, waves crash my structure.
As the sirens ring out in a sweet surreal melody my
Gut swirls at the thought of its silence. If this
Raging stream below me were to dry I fear I would
Lose meaning in this muse.
Now I am deserted with the callous stone shadowing
Upon my battered remains. A fiery Sisyphean devotion
Has now been my sentence as I wait in my eternal Hades.
(3/9/2008 12:55:00 PM)
just wanted to post my poem here
Walking on the woody ground
Saw the middle dark colours that hung around
They floated above us waving thru the blades
Me and my blue coat, heard grandma in a rage
oh my boy, don't run to far away
and then I heard the black birds panting
in a V-formation ahead and chanting
the orchestral keys in my head rang unnnoticed
Suddenly everything was blurry, I couldn’t focus
oh birdies, look at the birdies ma'
and everything was shining
and everyone was happy
and everything was fancy
and everyone was pretty
ooh birdies it was wonderful
how'd you like that? would be nice if someone could help me getting better...