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  • Rookie - 59 Points James Timothy Jarrett (8/8/2008 8:53:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply
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    Fuffy pillows

    I crawled from my bed

    Unaware of time.

    No concern of mine.

    Fluffy pillows left behind.

    I clutched my drink from the night stand.

    My only thought,

    It's still full, I think I'll take a pill.

    Instead, I walk out of my comfy confines

    Through the rooms I float.

    Loving hand long since gone.

    I approach my throne.

    I sit and pour a cup of lukewarm coffee left behind.

    Maybe this will help, I query in my mind.

    I guess time tics by me silently and slowly.

    I pick up a book, a flicker of thought, then away the thought flees.

    All thoughts fade.

    I sit and rock.

    Dead eyes ahead, still with empty head.

    I find myself once again in my bed.

    Fluffy pillows beneath my head.

    .

    ophelia payne

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  • Rookie - 9 Points Linda Winchell (8/4/2008 7:38:00 PM) Post reply

    One way to improve ones' poetry is to exspand ones' vocabulary. Understanding their meanings and how to use them and spelling is important for sure. Wish this site had a spell check. Helps so we don't have to cont. go and edit them. You think you have all the flaws covered, and wammo! There is another blooper! LOL
    Linda Winchell

  • Rookie Kaspa Richards (8/3/2008 11:35:00 AM) Post reply

    hi all, was hoping that if u have the time you could check out my poems especially my new one that i posted today called 'When you round me' and leave a comment would be gratefull also comment on any other poems if u wish to do so would love the feedback thanks for your time.

    kaspa

  • Rookie Kija Ajik (8/2/2008 8:46:00 PM) Post reply

    Please stop by my profile and read some of my stuff, I love feedback so criticize me lol

    Thank you all

    -Kija Ajik

  • Rookie - 12 Points Fay Slimm (8/2/2008 8:22:00 AM) Post reply

    I am attempting to combine writing verse using healing techniques with the framework of the poetry. My first attempt is found in my poem The Here and Now. I would be most grateful for any views. Greetings from Fay Slimm.

  • Rookie Goldy Locks (8/1/2008 11:49:00 PM) Post reply

    I keep to myself under the heavy drone of vacationers.
    But don't think for a moment -
    I cease to sing.

  • Rookie silver phoenix (7/30/2008 5:05:00 PM) Post reply

    Hey I'm new on this, I'd be glad if some of you have some time to rate or comment my poems, and constructive criticism serves me well too.
    Whoever writes, I naturally check their stuff as well.
    Thankyou,
    Kilian

  • Rookie J Lee (7/29/2008 2:17:00 PM) Post reply

    Hi to everyone out there.I am new to this poem thing but one poem i am very proud of is this Night Of Rising Moon.Come & see i convince anyone would like it.

  • Rookie archana sharma (7/28/2008 8:29:00 PM) Post reply

    hi, how do you deal with the inner struggles of a poet in deciding about the inclusion of that one last line which changes the whole shade or meaning of the poem? archana

  • Rookie Kaspa Richards (7/28/2008 4:30:00 PM) Post reply

    hi everybody if u have the time could you please spare some and check out my poems and leave your comments and constructive criticism especially my poem 'Early Mornings' would be gratefull for any input.

    thanks

    Kaspa

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