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  • Shreyan Roy (11/1/2013 7:02:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    The pencil and eraser

    You held my mistakes,
    a job of your life,
    for all i do you smile,
    erasing my mistakes meanwhile,
    you lose chunks of age every time,
    you pay for my imbecile crime,
    and erase them with forgiveness,
    you let me redo my path that are strays,
    guide me to the right ways,
    and yet you lose chunks of age,
    it's a natural curse of your usage,
    like the eraser are our parents,
    smile and loves devoted to us

    - shreyan roy

    please i request your feed back

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  • Herbert Guitang (10/30/2013 11:41:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Hello Honorable Poets. Kindly Read, rate, vote and comment my New Poem " I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU"

  • Ella Pitt (10/30/2013 11:21:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    I'm relatively new to poemhunter and definitely open to ideas and points of improvement. If anyone would be willing to check out/critique my poems particularly I am Cooked, Rubies and Garnets and The Perfectionist I will be eternally grateful!

  • Kaylin Ruth Adarne (10/30/2013 5:40:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    I really want to improve my poems. Please help me :) Thank you and I hope to read more from you guys.

  • Lanuja Viknarajah (10/28/2013 9:34:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    The past you cannot forget or undo,
    The future is all we can look forward too.

    I wish I could have been there by your side...
    For all the times you've weeped and cried

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  • Liyaqat Ali (10/28/2013 4:58:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    one day i said to rain come &
    overcome my pain,
    the clouds were dancing like
    as they are sane
    some were wondering
    giving me happy in chain, , , , , , , , , ,
    by shallow chum,

  • Abubakar Abdulkadir (10/26/2013 4:10:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Has he not been beared
    From seas to streams
    Marked with cutlasses and ashes
    Forced to swallow cowries
    Why would he not wear down his face?

    Has he not been living
    On his choiceless delicacy
    Concoction of gmelina roots
    And garlic sap
    Why then would he smile?

    Why would he dance?
    The voilent drummers in his skull
    Were pounding thier drums
    Like groups of carpenters
    Driving pieces of nails
    Into a hardwood

    Has he not been marched
    Round the village on pant
    Bearing a pot stained with dry hen's blood
    And rotten bones and stenching earth
    Why would he not dash out his wealth
    To seek a neater heath?

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    • Wojciech Kolesnikov (11/7/2013 12:41:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      That's very good. " ...drummers in his skull/pounding their drums leave out the Were. " Driving pieces of nails into hardwood" leave out a good luck...from Canada

  • Wasim Umar (10/25/2013 10:58:00 PM) Post reply Stage


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  • Shalini Samuel (10/25/2013 11:23:00 AM) Post reply Stage

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    A fishy day at bay

    Blue wave, white foam, washing the long shore
    with its tender soothing hands, brushing away
    my fading memories, polishing men's rock heart, at bay
    -akin to the pebbles, the bubbly kids search to store

    on a solitary rock, by the shore, a young man sits
    dreaming his untold future, the spluttering sprays
    banging the rock, returns back, filling water in pits
    sea retreats in agony, striking again angrily on her prey

    the candy man rings the bell, people run behind for a bite
    the balloons sway in his hands- bright red, blue and pink
    the shells, hiding an unknown craftsman, rests at the sales site,
    the groundnut covers, mango peels, the leftover snacks, stink

    sinking legs, wander aimlessly across the shore, holding hand
    sometimes alone, like two creepers intertwined, joy and sorrow guise
    the breaking dawn, sun rises, to the silent command of magic wand
    I look upon through the net, the arid faces, ripping hungry and fiery eyes

    enjoying weepily my solo day on shore; few hours afore, from the cold sea bed
    waving my friends, I had gone astray into the net, envisioning the shore gleam;
    suicidal I have been, caught in men's glitters of a wonder world afar, held
    by cruel hands, I knew not, this isn't my place; travelling back alive- just a daydream.

  • Nicholas Garcia (10/22/2013 9:24:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Take a look at my poetry! Poet name " Nicholas Peter" . Hope you guys dig it!

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