Writing Poetry

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Sarah Elise Female, 22, United States (7/5/2005 7:06:00 PM)

thunder resonates
oh so deep within my chest
lightning flashes 'fore my eyes
brightness at its best

my tired road is getting wet
raindrops sooth my mind
stormclouds clearly do not know
the right ways to unwind

mist on roses clear my thoughts
brings them to the sky
darkened shapes; clearly growing
birds may wish to say good bye

humid air is unforgiving
trees all bend to their expense
then they stop, in leafy splendor
will this thunderstorm dispense

i dont know what to call this piece. please tell me how you think i could improve the wording, if you can.

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  • Rookie Tony Jennett (10/9/2005 5:33:00 AM) Post reply
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    Advise? Punctuate. Depersonalise - too many 'I's and 'My's tell me what a clever girl you think you are. but don't let me discourage you. Your early effort is very promising and 'Who never made a mistake, never made anything'

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