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Suman Kumar Das Suman Kumar Das Male, 29, India (4/19/2014 10:59:00 PM)

Four Curses

To weep
Are needed two eyes,
Need also tears.
But the ones without eyes!
How they shed tears?
May those salty drops
Brim in all their hearts,
To a size of seven seas
Of this super creation.

To speak
Are needed few words,
Need also voice.
But the ones without voice!
How they talk words?
May those unsaid sounds
Inside their hollow hearts
Echo million times
As thunders crash in the sky.

To walk
Are needed two limbs
Need also destination.
But the ones without limbs!
How they stride across the way?
May those longing steps
Trek mile after mile every night,
Like the orbit around the sun,
Revolve the planets in the galaxy.

To listen
Are needed two ears
Need also mind.
But the ones without ears!
How they hear people?
May those unheard strains
Within their mute minds
Join torn strings of lives’ guitar
To play songs like musicians.

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  • Herbert Guitang Rookie - 1st Stage (4/26/2014 5:26:00 AM) Post reply

    Great in balance of stanzas and balance of sylabications

  • Cleveland Gibson Rookie - 1st Stage (4/23/2014 7:00:00 AM) Post reply

    I thought you handled the four curses well. Until, oh heck I thought of a fifth one: To Sleep.
    I can only guess it is a good thing when we wake up we've forgotten all our dreams, and the
    dreaded nightmares.Well done for jolting our memory.

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