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  • Rookie ~Deana ~ Dotterweich (1/27/2012 10:45:00 AM) Post reply
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    Im New So Please check out my Poems! ! ! Tell me what you think....

  • Rookie Mike Ebogha (1/27/2012 12:10:00 AM) Post reply

    Hi people, i am new to this site and i have been writing poems for about 4yrs now.I would be most grateful n happy if you can go through the ones i have posted on my profile n give me your opinion about it.

  • Rookie Jade4x Phoenix (1/21/2012 2:13:00 PM) Post reply

    Hi guys, just joined the forum, looking forward to learning and contributing as much as i can and putting up some of my work for your comments and criticism!

  • Rookie Aj Duchene (1/17/2012 10:56:00 AM) Post reply

    I'm a noob here but would greatly apprciate any coments on my poems. I have uploaded one but have quite a few others I will be adding. Thank you in advance for considering my poems for review.

  • Rookie Jtw Flosper (1/6/2012 12:01:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    This is my second poem ever
    I just opened a word document and wrote it from start to finish. Anyways this is just about my faith over this past school year. Anyways, even if you aren't religious, tell me what you think of the poem.
    Thursday nights, Bible study, hip-hop and history, praying like a dying man whose salvation’s a mystery
    Still up there in the back of my mind, the way it used to be, the days when I was free
    With the love of my God on the tip of my tongue, and the trees pumping air to my liberated lungs,
    When the day passed painlessly with hope for a future
    When getting out of bed didn’t feel like bursting a suture.
    I want the love back, the love that used to be mine
    The love that came down in the flowing sunshine
    When death held no fear
    Living no tears
    When I knew that I wanted to live another year
    But the walls are closing in each day, each hour
    Overcharging mental engines but I’m running out of power
    Like the water’s run out and I’m an over-petalled flower
    Each minute each hour I can feel me going sour
    You used to keep me up
    You used to keep me strong
    When I fell down I never waited for you long
    But I’ve dug so deep, been in a cave so long
    I don’t have to common sense to grab hold of your arms
    Lift me out

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    • Rookie Aj Duchene (1/17/2012 11:08:00 AM) Post reply

      JT, Two things strike me here. One about your poem and another about your faith. Both of them I believe to be good. Your poem shows to me that you have a lot that you want to say and get off your ... more

  • Rookie Juan Guzman (12/15/2011 12:18:00 AM) Post reply

    Well i think all the poems that i have ever wrtten are free form, so id love it if other free form poets could read and comment on my poems, thank you.

  • Rookie Teza Lee (11/13/2011 4:44:00 PM) Post reply

    hey can you plaese look at my new poem its called _*MY HEART*_ please rate and comment thanks teza x

  • Rookie Gordon Tseng (11/10/2011 12:43:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    God Bless Not Only America

    God bless the hungry, in Columbia or in Cambodia, in Europe or in Ethiopia.
    God bless all farmers, growing potatoes or tomatoes, bananas or papayas.
    God bless all bears, pandas in China, polar bears in Canada, or cola bears in Australia.
    God bless the codes and the buttons of nuclear weapons, in Arizona or in Siberia.

    God bless all children, drinking dirty water or Coca-Cola.
    God bless the dreams, both in Bollywood’s or Hollywood’s cinema.
    God bless all Gods or their wise friends, Laozi or Confucius, Muhammad or Buddha.
    Oh, my God, oh, our God, could you please bless all of us, not only America?

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  • Rookie - 6 Points Ralph The Elf (10/22/2011 4:56:00 PM) Post reply

    awwww what a wonderful day

    i roll over and there she is

    starring at the skyline with her bright smile

    her dimples so deep i think i could take a swim

    her smile could heal a heart failure

    she turns to me and just then

    oh just then

    i behold her eyes

    like emeralds they gleam

    on the moonlit lawn

    ADELAIDE i call

    my throat graced with her name

    my heart missed a beat as she coughed so elegantly

    for this girl there are no words in the world

    the least i could say is beauty

  • Rookie Bruce Gatten (9/25/2011 1:01:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I would like to post a poem. Comments are appreciated, brcgatten@gmail.com

    5 am and not a hint of dawn-
    Lament for the darkness
    Lament, for all our sins counted are,
    Sweet lady,
    All our deeds recorded
    And this is rightly done.

    You lay quiet through the years,
    The silent snow years...
    Now awaken, awaken
    O mind of the four directions,
    Be herald to the coming of dawn.

    6: 30 am and note well
    The scars of night battle,
    As dreams are, awaken and see
    The utter necessity for light.

    7: 00 am and the sun rises
    And it is a new day,
    Search for the beginning of things;
    A child's cry in the dark.

    But alas, there are no monsters
    Under the bed.

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    • Rookie Juan Guzman (12/15/2011 12:21:00 AM) Post reply

      I'm can see a couple writting error's but, i find this poem incredible and enjoyed reading it from begging to start, Thank you.

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